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tanha
May 27, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

This time

This timeWhen you comeBring flowers and pain tooWe will Divide, I'll say What i carry too This timeWhen you come  Leave shoes and tensionOutsideI will keep my headOn your shoulderwill share with youThe night's dream This timeWhen you come Do not recite tales of officeTune melody musicI'll be with you When moon gradually come. This timeWhen you comeBring time in your fistI'll hold tightlyYour handsWe both will handle The slipping time  IfIt's impossible to do anythingDo not think anythingI'll wait though.
— tanha, May 27, 2010

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Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years ago

There’s an ephemeral

There's an ephemeral quality to this, I can't get my head around or my hands on. I read your other poems. I think you are soon a force to be reckoned with. ~ "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta
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tanha

16 years ago

Thank you very much for your

Thank you very much for your valuable comments after the ardh viram,i mean comma, by the way what "ephemeral" stands for? You might call me "fool", but with a difference I remain
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ShePra

16 years ago

It’s beautiful & what I

It’s beautiful & what I feel was... This time when you come Come & reside Reside in my eyes So that my sight Leads to you... I loved the theme of your poem it leads to many directions keep writing.. God Bless You..
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tanha

16 years ago

Thank you for making it more

Thank you for making it more valuable This time when you come Come & reside Reside in my eyes So that my sight Leads to you… can i borrow these lines please just joking God bless you