My Weeping Willow

My weeping willow

I have heard the song

Coming from your heart

I know you have been hurt

I know the cuts are so deep

That a life time

Is just not enough time

To fully heal

I know you have been an island

An island in the middle of the sea

But no more my love

You are no longer alone

Alone in your pain

I have seen the secret rooms

In your cave

And I am not afraid

I am holding a light for you

Take my hand

Walk with me

Shed your chains

Dance in the breeze

— hobo, May 26, 2010

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Country/Region: USA

Critiques

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Randy

Dancing in the wind sounds wonderful but its pouring down rain here tonight and very windy ... loved your poem I see nothing to fault well done :) love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

lou

16 years ago

AWWW

Romance isn't dead love lou xx

raskin

16 years ago

Lovely, the gentle sway of

Lovely, the gentle sway of the weeping willow. Reminds me of summer, loving, beautiful. raskin

Arrow

16 years ago

I loved these lines:

know the cuts are so deep That a life time Is just not enough time To fully heal That is life's tragedy eloquently put. I like your uncluttered use of language and think the images are appropriate and that you have a moving poem overall. My only complaint is all the changeing imagery. You're a tree, now you're an island, now you're in a cave. It jumps around a little too much for me. I prefer one strong image/metaphor worked fully through. Good job.

xena465

16 years ago

Super Hobo

Sincere and beautiful words...I love it. Rosina xena465

hippiepoet69

16 years ago

Thumbs up

I would hold the light for my Lady too. While she chops the firewood. Take Care. huey