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May 24, 2010
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OLD PEOPLE
You see them every now and then
maybe when you're with a friend
or maybe even on a date
those old couples who make us late
They walk slowly , arms entwined
obstructing those who walk behind
and creep along without a worry
for those who might be in a hurry
Instead of thinking ,what to eat
while in the line on shuffling feet
instead, the menu they debate
at order time and make us wait
They finally get to their booth seat
and take their pills(all so discreet)
sometimes they even cough and sneeze
fewer bodily functions, please!
As they sit there barely talking
(conversation slower than their walking)
they mostly just look at each other
as if still in love, Oh brother!
Across the table hands are held
I half expect appendage meld
occasionally they whisper, smile
look at each other for a while
What can they chance to have to say
so late at their lives' end of day
they've not said to each other 'fore
(if listened to ,I bet they'd bore)
as they very slowly dine
perhaps drinking a cup of wine
or tea thus making ice cubes tinkle
the old coots' eyes 'most seem to twinkle
And look at her with teeth so white
(somebody's dentures fit just right)
she acts as if it's just the two
and ignores both me and you
They finally finish, rise to leave
for support, she grasps his sleeve
they tip small and pay the bill
both creeping 'long like nuns still
As they leave so does frustration
at old couples across the nation
look at them still hand in hand
what a lucky,lucky man
maybe when you're with a friend
or maybe even on a date
those old couples who make us late
They walk slowly , arms entwined
obstructing those who walk behind
and creep along without a worry
for those who might be in a hurry
Instead of thinking ,what to eat
while in the line on shuffling feet
instead, the menu they debate
at order time and make us wait
They finally get to their booth seat
and take their pills(all so discreet)
sometimes they even cough and sneeze
fewer bodily functions, please!
As they sit there barely talking
(conversation slower than their walking)
they mostly just look at each other
as if still in love, Oh brother!
Across the table hands are held
I half expect appendage meld
occasionally they whisper, smile
look at each other for a while
What can they chance to have to say
so late at their lives' end of day
they've not said to each other 'fore
(if listened to ,I bet they'd bore)
as they very slowly dine
perhaps drinking a cup of wine
or tea thus making ice cubes tinkle
the old coots' eyes 'most seem to twinkle
And look at her with teeth so white
(somebody's dentures fit just right)
she acts as if it's just the two
and ignores both me and you
They finally finish, rise to leave
for support, she grasps his sleeve
they tip small and pay the bill
both creeping 'long like nuns still
As they leave so does frustration
at old couples across the nation
look at them still hand in hand
what a lucky,lucky man
— scribbler, May 24, 2010
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Critiques
Seren
16 years ago
Dear Scribbler
scribbler
16 years ago
old people
xena465
16 years ago
This is great Stan
Kailashana
16 years ago
There was a wonderful
weirdelf
16 years ago
There a some scansion errors could be amended
weirdelf
16 years ago
Scansion is basically flow
scribbler
16 years ago
flow
raskin
16 years ago
Lovely, lighthearted story
hippiepoet69
16 years ago
Great write, Stan
scribbler
16 years ago
booth
mand
16 years ago
A lovely poem, isn’t it
scribbler
16 years ago
old poeple
scribbler
16 years ago
old people