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A Youthful Dream

I struggled,
in my youth
I was the amazon
that nature intended
I was blooded with
a mongols sword
I was fearless and took life
by the jugular and twisted

I have shown
the many faces
of Eve
but never
the real beauty
of true strength,
in and of, I,
had never let
myself just be,
the feeling
breathing being,
that fate's
creator intended,
to be fearless

I was found
in strength
to still be a weak
and frightened child

that was
long ago, now,
I have forgotten
the Lost Boys and Peter,
and the tick-tock
stopped in another realm
Sleeping Beauty now rests
between yellowing pages,
and Pinocchio is just
a blue fairy dream

the first blood stained
every rhyme and story,

as the blood ran,
so their words
were forever erased 

only now
I write my own myth
 

— Seren, May 24, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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lou

lou

16 years ago

Great

Oh to be young, I love the first stanza. love lou xx
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dearest Lou

I dont ever want to go back to my childhood unless it can be a different one lol but I can see it now with adult eyes and see that it's made up who I have become ... thanks for the comment hun its appreciated love and big hugs JayCee x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Dear Jayne

This a great answer that you gave to Lou. I understand it and respect it completely. Love, Cat
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years ago

Indeed!;-)~“Just as what

Indeed! ;-) ~ "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Mum

Thank you (hugs) love Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
xena465

xena465

16 years ago

Old stories and Fairytales

We loved them when we were young. Now that you are a great writer of poetry, you are a master in your own right. But I'm sure you still love them...they’re always a part of us, and sometimes, it’s those stories and memories that gives us the gift to write…Superb JayCee. Rosina xena465
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Rosina

I was a child that was awestruck in fairytales and lost myself in them to shut out life ... and you've right I still love them lol I have copies of all the books above my head and the movies from disney sit with them lol ... yes I believe in faeries ;) love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Geezer

Geezer

16 years ago

No myth...

are you. You have brought me strength when I needed it most. I see a Mongol princess, striding through Neopoetland, swinging a sword, and slaying the monsters of fear. The words from your pen, become javelins of light, exposing the darkest of hours for the niggling bits they are in life. The tic-tock rests with the captain's hand, in the river. Sleeping Beauty, has married her prince, and Pinocchio's nose has been whittled to size. I love the inclusion of the fairy tales. It makes your tale bigger, and better. love and hig bugs, ~ Gee
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dearest Gee

if I brought you strength this write was all worth it ... it wasnt an easy write ... its sometimes hard to look at the road that we have taken to become the person we are ... I dont think I ahve even stratched the surface but i am getting there they come when they are ready Gee I believe your comment could become a poem my friend I would hope you would look at writing it thanks for the wonderful comment and giving me a lift cause it was my turn to need it today love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Geezer

Geezer

16 years ago

I might just do that...

I love those old fairy-tales. I used to tell my children and nephews, what I called Uncle Guy's Fractured fairy-tales, where I mixed up the characters, and they would roar, and yell so loud that my wife, or sis's would come in and make me leave so that they could settle down, and go to sleep. LOL You have brought me strength many times, not just now, and it is greatly appreciated. I hope that I in turn have brought you some measure of laughter, and bit of a lift. ~ love and hig bugs, ~ Gee
Z

ziggy

16 years ago

hi

hi this so well pieced together i really love where you say "i have shown the many faces of eve" and of course " i was found in strenght to be a week and frightend child" i really love]love love that last quote from you and what it says to me is that until we are tested when do we truly know our limitations , jayne this write is a beaut,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Ziggy

So happy you liked this one tbh I didnt think may people would like it ... its a deeply personal look at self we dont always like what we see but like I said above its makes us who we are ... and thats so true until we are tested we dont know our limitations ... tested to the hilt I now write it love and big hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
L

Lonnie

16 years ago

This is very beautiful!

I think if I were ever to write like a woman, I would try to emulate your style! You have a distinctive flair for simplistically seducing your reader with bold imagery and even bolder language! Kudos on another Gem!
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Lonnie

It took me such a long time to find the real me, and now in my words its not just an imagined me ... thanks so much for the lovely compliment ... thats high praise coming from you ... I would love to see you write like Cat does with Eddy, I believe you could pull it off without a doubt love and big hugs and thanks Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
hobo

hobo

16 years ago

very nice

I like this. I really like the lines I was found in strength to still be a weak and frightened child there are so many good poets here with so many good lines and you my friend are one of the good ones
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Randy

I believe that some of the poets from here will be remembered their work is so distinctive that it cant be ingored and most of them have already printed their own books ... thanks for the lovely comment ... I am just a scribbler lol but I love my poetry love and big hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

16 years ago

Jayne

"a sword of a Mongol"..."a Mongol's sword", perhaps? I would lose the question marks and punctuation after both "now"s, they cause sort of like a rest stop on a sheet of music, a hesitation that breaks the rhythm, for me. A beautiful piece of work, Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Jim

The edit was just done and I loved all of your suggestions and changed that line as well thanks so much for the help lol if you have any suggestions for the title ? it would be appreciated, this ones being a bitch to name lol love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dearest Cat

I am just happy you enjoyed the read hun thanks for the pretties much love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Ravenshakti

Ravenshakti

16 years ago

Dear Seren..

A strong and gorgeous poem... Excellent work. Gentle regards, Raven-Shakti "The greatness of a nation and its moral progress can be judged by the way its animals are treated." Mohandas K. Ghandi
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Raven

Thanks so much for the read I am very happy you enjoyed it peace and light JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
sunscreen

sunscreen

16 years ago

Amazing, your poems always

Amazing, your poems always make me smile, I'm sorry i haven't been around lately, I have had issues, and I'm never at home any more, I spend all my time away.
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Alex

Thank you for the lovely compliment ... I am sorry your having a hard time hun if you ever need someone to talk to you know where to find me ... (((hugs))) love JayCee x x x btw now your back I will post the spoon poem I had been waiting to see you around lol couldnt have you missing it ;) ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

I have a couple of things on

I have a couple of things on for the next couple of days but I will post that one sunday night my time ... so that would make it sunday morning your time roughly lol ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
loved

loved

16 years ago

no mattter how u change

.............. No matter how u change Ur snap Ur logo Ur words Ur love Ur intense feelings Ur helping attitude Ur morale rising Nothing can you of these Change a bit Simply because u change Ur face You can And will be seen Still.......
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

You would be surprised how

You would be surprised how easy I am forgotten Loved ;) lol thanks for the comment glad you liked it Love JayCee x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")