lou

May 24, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Peach Flesh

Ripe Peach burnished with dew
blush caressing a sensuous globe
of plump flesh

Nibble puckered skin and expose
soft golden tissue oozing nectar
that dribbles down the chin

Devour, guzzle, and consume each bite
oh the pleasure and delight
as you probe the depths within

Almond shaped stone laid bare,
upon the plate glistening with the
sweet residue

THIS WAS A BLOG ENTRY I DELETED , THEN I DECIDED TO RE POST IT

— lou, May 24, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda , Jack Kerouac, Alan Ginsberg, D.H Lawrence, Jim Morrison's lyrics,

Critiques

xena465

16 years ago

Nice one my wee Londoner

I'm so glad you did bring it to the poetry page. Very few poems get read or commented on, on blogs and the forum...great stuff Lou. Rosina xena465

lou

16 years ago

Thanks

I thought more people would comment if I posted it here. thanks xena xx

xena465

16 years ago

It's only been a few hours. I've always found that if you read more of other people's poems, especially the poets that appreciate a comment from you, will come to your page. I read lots of poems and comment a lot, but sometimes some poets don’t even acknowledge my comment. This isn’t very polite. So what I’ve always done is stick with the poets that are kind and considerate and helpful. Kelsey has left you a lovely comment, you should reply to thank her. The same goes for everyone who takes the time to read and comment. Rosina xena465

lou

16 years ago

hi

Yes i am reading other people's work. I always reply to people's comments. thanks xena love lou xx

Beauregard

16 years ago

oh Lou,

now I'm hungry! I think the imagery here is superb! I don't think I've ever seen anyone able to describe something so messy so beautifully! If I could suggest anything, it would be to adjust 3.1. I like the word "guzzle" so much, I think it should stand alone, instead of being surrounded by synonyms. And of course, 'Guzzle each bite' might not be what you're looking for with that line, it's just a humble suggestion. :) Kelsey

lou

16 years ago

Hi

Thanks Kelsey, i'll look at what u suggested. lou xx

Seren

16 years ago

Dearest Lou

its like you guys are all tormenting me with the food I cannot eat last time it was one of barrys poems and it was tomatos lol yep I have a few alergys lol loved your poem if I cant say thats what its like I dont remember its been that long lol love and big hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

lou

16 years ago

Dear JayCee

Sorry to torment you lol thanks love lou xx

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Dear Lou

I'm so glad you re-posted it so I got the chance to enjoy it. You brought back a childhood memory for me of eating cool peaches under a hot sunny sky. Always, Cat

lou

16 years ago

Dear Cat

What a lovely compliment , thank you love lou xx

ziggy

16 years ago

hi

hi and good to read you nice write the third stanza is my fav, and how well do you give out the images you write on, ps the quote you have on your page on jim morrison , read his book no one gets out alive, he was a huge talent but hell bent on excess, i was quite a big doors fan many years ago i even did a big painting of him on my bedroom wall back then when i lived at home lol god knows how i got away with being let do it lol chat soon ,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs

lou

16 years ago

Hi

Thanks Zigs, i'm glad you liked the poem. I still love The Doors and Jim Morrison, I think I own every book published on the subject. lol love lou xx

Hooded Stranger

16 years ago

Mouth watering!

Mouth-watering images and a good structure to boot. Like Ziggy, I like this stanza the best: Devour, guzzle, and consume each bite oh the pleasure and delight as you probe the depths within kindest regards, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

lou

16 years ago

Hi

Thank you love lou xx