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Dopamine

A love-sick lad like me has more dopamine count,
At twenty-two, I loved every eve, sick was my mind,
Monotony and mistaken identity forced my love,
An unknown search was for pleasure in fancy.

A fling with her was unforeseen, dallying alone
In a corner unseen.  My obdurate face wrinkled
A rotten orange it was.  Yet comely and alluring,
Innumerable worms lived inside singing hymns.

Peeling I found them.  Writhing wretchedness,
My mind was greedy. But the worms stopped me

A rotten orange not outside.  Inside it had decayed.
A whore that came to entice me with AIDS 
A wimp of her sort cannot subsist far beyond.

A rapturous death, a covetous perennial death!
Ugliness shaped into beauty. A rebirth of sex.

A girl friend taught me love.  Intricacies and divergence.
Filling my heart with absolute forgetfulness. Rapturous!
She bled and bled.  Yelled intolerably.  Entwined me,

Snow-like I remained.  Passive, melting and melting.
I saw God and Satan.  I loved both.  Blistering bellows
Of my palpitation she loved.  We were two- in -in one

Sing the melody of AIDS in HELL.





 
— U K Atiyodi, May 24, 2010

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jon stone

16 years ago

Deep!

YOU HAVE A WAY WITH PAINTING A PICTURE WITH WORDS.. TO ME THIS WRITE IS A GOOD DESCRIPTION OF HOW THE FLESH IN ALL IT'S BEAUTY AND TEMTATION CAN BRING SLOW DEATH. AND TO KNOW THAT THE SAME ACT THAT BROUGHT YOU IN THIS WORLD CAN ALSO KILL YOU, I HAVE A SIBLING WITH AIDS GOOD WRITE.
UA

U K Atiyodi

16 years ago

Reply to jonstone

Dear friend, Sensual pleasure in excess is the root cause of all evil. What you said about uncontrolled carnal desire is apt. Thank you for the observation.