FILTERED THOUGHTS

Cannot the eyes of the mind
see thru it's very thoughts
or follow the waves of deception
in it's hollows filled with rot

of premonitions that are really dreams
with minds true intentions
passed thru these filtered screens
of space inside where doubts arise
to change direction of truths to lies

as a front we hold to face each day
for unexpected questions that come our way
wanting to say what we really mean
words fall short our faults are many
outward thoughts too clean

— mantiscepter, May 24, 2010

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Critiques

Seren

16 years ago

Dear John

As always you write beautifully ... this one needs a couple of tweaks nothing major more the format than anything but that maybe just me wait and see what others say love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

xena465

16 years ago

Excellent John

Wonderful words of wisdom. I enjoyed where this took me in my thoughts...great stuff. Just a couple of wee typos... see thru {it’s} very thoughts …[its] in {it’s} hollows filled with rot …[its] Rosina xena465

mantiscepter

16 years ago

Filtered Thoughts

Thanx again Rosina, for stopping to reply on my poetry' it would probably be better, with some tweaks, or ? anyway have a good day. John Mantiscepter

xena465

16 years ago

Hi John

With this line...see thru {it’s} very thoughts …[its] if you change {it's} to the full form it becomes... "see thru it is very thoughts", which doesn't read properly. and with this line...in {it’s} hollows filled with rot …[its] same thing..."in it is hollows filled with rot". Changing {it's} to [its] reads better, don't you think? I could be wrong, as I'm no expert with grammar. Just want to help...gosh do I need it most of the time, but very few people do help, mainly for fear of being told off. Rosina xena465

U K Atiyodi

16 years ago

Dear Mantisceptor, There is

Dear Mantisceptor, There is philosophy in your poem. You speak the eyes of the mind. So you have become a good poet.

mantiscepter

16 years ago

FILTERED THOUGHTS

Nice to have your comments on my site here Atiyodi, I'm John Pleased to meet you. This is a good write that sends many messages if people can read between the lines... I thank-you again for your comments and Hope to see you out here again. John. Mantiscepter

yenti

16 years ago

Young Man

The battle twix bad and good keeps us on our toes as you said above, the outside will be as you wish it to be, but the truth and pure thoughts are held inside, inbetween there is a land we each make that is of our own use of the inner self and the expressed words that comes from the battle within, in purity we would only speak with the inner self as that is linked to many like minds, great write, Yours ian.T

magics02

16 years ago

Manti

Yenti said it all for me the exact feelings I have about this poem and all, Yes to tidy it up maybe make the lines shorter, pull them down a bit and your poetry is sailing away, good job Manti ANd Yenti he took the feelings right out of my mouth here tonite. Love and Hugs Mona

mantiscepter

16 years ago

FILTERED THOUGHTS

Very kind words Sir. Happy to hear this write was good enough to have a place on your smiley list. I Love stories that lead to a newer level of inner revelation. attuned to life. Nice to se and hear from you Ian. John. Mantiscepter