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A Dirge Lullaby

I just couldn't see or bear your plight
while braving a tempest on a fateful night
trying to chasten your devout spirit
to forgive, to soothe, to cheer a life
to greet a birth or grieve in a wreath
a spirit that giveth, never receiveth
beyond a praise, for your beauty's sake
sadly, no one would come, a bee or a butterfly
nor a lark to sing you a dirge lullaby....
 

So I picked you and brought you home
to save you the chills of wintry storms
laying you gently on a flower bed
beside me by my window pane
where I could watch over you like a bedside clock
watch the bees frolic on your stalks
or a gentle breeze flirting with your charm
each breath of yours I will cherish and keep
till breath would play its part and sleep...
 

My voice did choke with a pregnant pause
while lifting you with my trembling hands
laying you gently in my prayer book
closer to God, safe and sound
where a tempest won't harm your weathered form
now lying secure in a sacred calm

raj (sublime_ocean)...

— raj, May 23, 2010

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magics02

16 years ago

Ocean

This is a great piece I have noting to crit on it and I liked the flow and the wording used immensely. Your a very good writer and keep them coming. A treasure and was this a butterfly perhaps or a rose? Got me guessing here. Love,Mona xoxoxo TIME well spent is TIME well lived
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raj

16 years ago

Mona..

you must be pulling my leg when you say i got you guessing..obviously this is sort of an ode to a flower....good to know you liked the wording... warmly ...raj (sublime_ocean)..
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magics02

16 years ago

Ode to a Flower

And that is the beautiful rose you were writing about, I was pretty close as a rose is rose anyway you look at it. Great one ocean!! Love,Mona TIME well spent is TIME well lived
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raj

16 years ago

yes Mona

you were pretty close in guessing it to be about a rose....it giveth a lot but receiveth pretty nothing in return..so i thought of writing about it... wishing you smiles always...raj (sublime_ocean)...
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Raj

I would break this one up format wise? but other than that its another lovely write I see nothing to crit (other than the format) love and hugs JayCee x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
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raj

16 years ago

JayCee

good to know you liked the write...please let me know what you find wrong with the format...perhaps you could be referring to the 9, 9, 6 line format...whatever it is i will wait for your comment and improve...a learning experience i cherish... love n hugz...raj (sublime_ocean)...
xena465

xena465

16 years ago

Lovely write Raj

I enjoyed reading this very much...deep and meaningful in feeling...I love it. Just one wee typo... sadly, no one would come, a bee or a {butterfy} …[butterfly] Rosina xena465
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raj

16 years ago

Rosina

you are sharp eyed and caught the spello spot on...i got it corrected already...appreciate your pointing it out...and your comment... warmly...raj(sublime_ocean)..
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raj

16 years ago

Thank you Mand for your

Thank you Mand for your comment much appreciated i look forward to reading more of yours.. warmly ..raj (sublime_ocean)..