themoonman

May 23, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

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I have my ass in overdrive,
a double coffee helps my run.
Too many hours, too much overtime,
who will care when I am gone?

Do ya think there'll be
some maker of me
that will pat me on the back?
Well I believe my mind
will've simply died,
and I won't wonder where I'm at.

To me...
it's greedy to think there's more,
and god was original sin,
so I greet each day in my usual way,
and gratefully smile up to its end.

— themoonman, May 23, 2010

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

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Kailashana

16 years 2 months ago

Life is shit sometimes. And

Life is shit sometimes. And if you still can smile, Moonman, you are a wise man. ~A "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta

themoonman

16 years 2 months ago

Anna...

I do try and smile through it all, sometimes it is a very difficult ordeal when the big fan is on, but what good does it do to be sad/mad about it, it doesn't change anything. Richard

Kailashana

16 years 2 months ago

Indeed my dear Moonman, I

Indeed my dear Moonman, I have found the only emotion that is self-sustaining is joy, bliss and love. Anything else depletes my energy, even if at first I am smothered, obsessed or stark raving mad. ;-) However, remember there are some things we have within our power to change and say *no*, that's *enough*. Love, Anna "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Richard

I can only smile and nod ... wonderful poem hun I loved it cannot see anything I would change love and hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

themoonman

16 years 2 months ago

Hi Jayne...

thanks, glad it made you smile hope you are having a great day

xena465

16 years 2 months ago

Great write Richard

Good fun and a very nice read. Rosina xena465

themoonman

16 years 2 months ago

Rosina...

glad you liked it, thank you for reading and commenting.

Geezer

16 years 2 months ago

More!

I won't apologise for wanting more. ~ Gee

themoonman

16 years 2 months ago

Hi Gee...

somehow I figured you may like this one... thanks

Race_9togo

16 years 2 months ago

Richard

"it’s greedy to think there’s more, and god was original sin, so I greet each day in my usual way, and gratefully smile up to its end." Absolutely. Excellent write man, excellent. And not one thing to critique. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race

themoonman

16 years 2 months ago

Jim...

I know you are reading this with the intention I wrote it in... thanks! Richard

arja

16 years 2 months ago

..I truly can relate to

..I truly can relate to this.. }}}APPLAUSE{{{

themoonman

16 years 2 months ago

Alone...

I don't know about the applause, but I'm glad you could relate... thanks Richard

lyz

16 years 2 months ago

Dearest Richard

I smile with you and excellent write. Always Lyz. XX

themoonman

16 years 1 month ago

Hi Lyz...

glad to see you here and smiling... thanks for reading

scribbler

16 years 1 month ago

First read of yours.It does seem like fit shappens for no reason at times, but I agree what can you do but keep on keeping on.fellow sandlapper......scribbler

themoonman

16 years 1 month ago

Sandlapper...

It's been a while since I've heard that one... To keepin on keepin on welcome again Richard

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