"Ice Queen"

you will never fight alone not while I am around speechless love hubby xoxoxoxoxoxox

...with apart from a poetic mind a lovely hubby who always stands behind... gr888888 couple u 222222222222

because I want to rest quietly in the meadows of your heart. That sounds like a wonderful idea right now. 1.4: "bled" --> 'bleed' 5.1: "I had to come" --> 'I came' 8.2: "black ice stare" --> something like 'black arctic stare' or 'frozen black stare' (try to not repeat "ice" from 5.2) Sweet dreams, Jayne. This was beautiful. Kelsey

I can feel the power of your words...Just Soooooooooooo...brilliant JayCee. Rosina xena465

I agree with Rosina, you think outside the box. Lovely indeed. Love Mand xxxx

Ann of Norway First a wonderful poem dear Jayne. And how! Your words so well thought out flow into our consciousness and fix our minds on you to experience your every utterance as if it were our own. We smart at your position, cowed and wilted before the sword of your loved man, and understand what love can do for our lives, you put it so eloquently and with such grand feelings of pathos mixed with the desire to live on forever in your bliss, and yet we understand this cannot be so, not for any of us, in the end. How right you are that this battle is to be fought alone, this we all know is true and would not that it was so, wishing to aid those in need with all we can give them, but it is so. I like the use of sound, I don't mean the sound of the words, I mean the meaning of the sounds implied by the words, the clashing and the laying down of the sword, gives this an operatic feel to it as regards this sound. I love this:- "But I have become night
with a black sightless stare," "I’ve come to bleed for you my love"............I would like I HAVE BECOME INSTEAD OF I'VE! "I came 
as a winter’s breath of ice, ".....oh bother me what? I would prefer LIKE to as. "and it beats of mercy still" "in the heat of the clash 
 
then as scorching
heat I found you,"........I would prefer not the repetition of heat? "wound its way up your legs,
I stared it back down 
to cower at your feet".... ...I find this slightly illogical the climbing up and you leave us up then suddenly are cowering and looking up from below! Have I been hard? I am being honest. I love this poem and wish it to be THE BEST. Love to you and Snake from Ann.

Ice queen? We shall melt in your presence. ~ "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta

I am wondering; did you mean, [where] I found a man? I stumbled on that line, but got the sentiment quite clearly. Yes, some battles are best fought alone. That way, we don't have the distraction of protecting someone whilst fighting the fight. Your love is obvious to all. ~ love and hig bugs, ~ Gee ~ p.s. Thanks for your help, in keeping lou here, she is a very good poet, and deserves to be part of the family.

I found all of your lines to be inspiring, but these resonated: it was in a war for love, were I found a man still drawing pistols at dawn, that was you Someone said that you and Snake are a wonderful couple... they are right. Someday you should write a poem about the road you took to becoming that couple. Love, Cat

...love this lines: "I came as a winter’s breath of ice, when the dust of days choked your throat in the heat of the clash" ...very mysterious, makes me want to learn more and read on.. ;)