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Candlewitch
Candlewitch
May 23, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

On The Shoal


On The Shoal
by: eddy styx

My history's ancient elegy
Litany of my soul's malaise,
Written and burning in my head
Twisted tortured and half crazed.
Agonized by your structured tales
The trail of lies seem endless,
Spinning spider's heart weaving webs
Hanging by a thread
of your colorless soul
You would see me lost,
Awash in your wake.
unaware that I will take you down with me
On this journey of soiled dank depression,
As I caress your velvet throat
With these deliberate dark artist's hands.
Die deliciously darling
Decidedly distressed,
While I feel your life-force thrashing
Crashing on the shores
of my desperate despair.
— Candlewitch, May 23, 2010

About This Poem

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Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda, Jim Morrison, the whole of Neopoet and many more., Candlewitch

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Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dearest Cat

LOL I am one of Eddys biggest fans and having him next to my bed lol I can reach for him whenever I like big smile ... thanks for sharing this one I see nothing to crit hun ...will come back and double check for you tomorrow I am tired tonight love and big hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Dear Jayne

Eddy thanks you from the bottom of his little black heart ;) Love, Cat
Z

ziggy

16 years ago

hi /eddy

hi i was not expecting a post from you but i am glad you let eddy out of the box and what a feast of words it is with lines like "on this journey of soiled dank depression" and "agonized by your structured tales" "spinning spider`s heart weaving webs hanging by a thread of your colourless soul " what a feast of words you offer us eddy as cat is on the mend cheers i am loving it thank you ,,,,,,,,zigs x
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Dear Ziggy

Thanks so much for your appreciation. I really like those lines, too. Always Eddy/Cat
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Hello

I'm glad you liked the imagery! Always, Eddy/Cat
Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

16 years ago

Eddy

Cat, Eddy never fails to let me down...this is text book Styx and i can't fault the structure or style. Stand out lines for me: As I caress your velvet throat With these deliberate dark artist’s hands that is so...Eddy Styx! I also like the same lines already picked out by Zigs. Maybe you'll treat us to a poem regarding the pain you are currently in...I always find strong emotions and feelings set me off on a writing frenzy. If you do, call it 'Staple'...I still have that haunting image of you being patched up with such a mundane stationery item...the stapler! Lol! HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Dear HS

You're right that line is so Styxian! You will probably be hearing more from Eddy while I am laid up with my silly pills. I might try a poem on the pain but not sure I will post it. If I write one I will let you an Zigs know. Staples... how undignified! LOL! Always, Eddy/Cat
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Hi Louis!

Glad to see you on my page and that you let me know you liked my poem Always, Cat
hobo

hobo

16 years ago

wow wee

wow wee, strong and I like it
loved

loved

16 years ago

i love animals

......because they r most faithful more than human beings I am one myself
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

16 years ago

you know,

I like Eddy's mind. Is that fucked up, or what? heehee... Excellent write, Cat, I hope the knee is better. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Hi Jim

and I'm so glad that you do! I think all of us are a little fucked up, here and there Eddy just chooses to let his show. Thank you for your comment. Always, Eddy/Cat
judyanne

judyanne

16 years ago

awesome write eddy

i especially love 'Litany of my soul’s malaise, Written and burning in my head Twisted tortured and half crazed' give my love to cat and tell her i'm sending healing love to her knee. xxx love judy http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Dear Judy

You are a lady of discerning taste, lol. I thank you for reading my poem and pointing out what appealed to you. Cat welcomes all the good vibes she can get. Always, Eddy/Cat