rainbows travel up our spines

your shirt hangs on the dining room chair
and your poem weeps in my eyes,
we are made for this, feathers
and stones, little stories we tell
under the spiral that curls inside;

I am Diana in bas-relief, deer-footed,
a somber earthen plate, destiny spears
us against the trembling moon, rainbows
travel up our spines,
mud and radiance bestowed.

— Kailashana, May 22, 2010

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Seren

16 years ago

Dearest Mum

This ones short but in two stanza's you manage to say all you needed to ... nominated love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Kailashana

16 years ago

Thanks dear. It’s been

Thanks dear. It's been awhile since I made the top ten. Sniff. ~ "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta

weirdelf

16 years ago

I grow disenchanted

your poetic skills are such that you seem sometimes to assemble words without the voice of the goddess I have come to expect. Blame my expectations. Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible, "the alleged short-cut to knowledge, which is faith, is only a short-circuit destroying the mind." [Ayn Rand, Atlas Shrugged]

Kailashana

16 years ago

Well that might be true,

Well that might be true, Jess, even though I have written those type of poems even quite recently. However, you are absolutely right, I feel very much unlike any goddess of recollection and experience. I'm feeling very vulnerable. I am the hunted. ~ "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta

Beauregard

16 years ago

Diana, as in

Artemis? If I could offer a suggestion: 1.1: "on a chair" --> "on the/this/that chair" (seems like that would make said chair closer to narrator, like physically, which seems appropriate) Kelsey

Kailashana

16 years ago

Thanks Kelsey, I felt the

Thanks Kelsey, I felt the same missing link. Barry's shirt is on my dining room chair, almost changed it last night. Now, I will. Yes, I have a gorgeous antique plate that I hope I can make into an avatar. It's actually Japanese or Chinese. ~ "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta

Beauregard

16 years ago

sorry

that I didn't comment further. It was very late and mom was making me go to bed. She says "Type 'Goodbye'!" and I tried to type my suggestion for you and she says "That's more letters than goodbye! I KNOW YOU DON'T NEED ME TO SPELL IT FOR YOU!" hehe Kelsey

raj

16 years ago

short n nice...

i loved some very expressive lines such as.. destiny spears us against the trembling moon, rainbows travel up our spines, mud and radiance bestowed. warmly...raj (sublime_ocean)..

Kailashana

16 years ago

Thanks for noticing,

Thanks for noticing, Raj. It's interesting what poems we can write when we notice the beauty of life, always t/here just for the noticing. ~A "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta