scribbler

May 22, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

TRYING ANYTHING ONCE

Well here I go ,I'll try free verse
I guess that it could be lots worse

Dang!
I went and made a rhyme
it happens to me all the time!

I shall try to write with
   with structure nill
     and with no rhythm

a story sans any meter
or any type of classic form
I'ii not slip back into my norm
Damn! it happened again

I'll try writing as in prose
     and space
     it
        out
in a kind of random beat
not too bad,this could be neat

Shit!! I did it again !

They say free verse frees a poet
of having to adhere to any
preset structure or
preconceived ideas
    Hmmmm...Perhaps maybe I can do it
   It's lack of rhyme I now intuit....

ARRGH !!!!

well, that's it, my only try
henceforth with "classic" I'll get by
"Western Classic"'s my best fit
I can't write "free verse" for shit !

— scribbler, May 22, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

Critiques

Race_9togo

16 years ago

Very

Very funny. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race

scribbler

16 years ago

anything once

Glad you liked it.I struggle enough reading free verse,thought I'd make fun of the idea of me trying to write it....scribbler

magics02

16 years ago

Scribe

I also liked your try at this and give you credit for going outside your comfort zone. It made me laugh too. Your title was great. The theme was appealing and the beginning and ending brang it all home. This is in answer to what you asked at the end of your poem. I think you should try some more. Love,Mona xoxo TIME well spent is TIME well lived

scribbler

16 years ago

anything once

Really , I wrote as a joke against myself and was only intended as a light satire. This was not a legitimate attempt,but I'm flattered that ya'll think so.I don't think anyone should hold breath waiting on another from me. Thanks for reading and kind words......scribbler

scribbler

16 years ago

anything once

You've got to be kidding! But thank you.If you really liked it as a legitimate free verse,you'd better save it as it is likely my only attempt.ha!ha! Think I'll stick to boring old "western classic" and continue trying to figure out your favorite fort'. dumbfoundedly yours......scribbler

scribbler

16 years ago

anything once

I hit spotlight? let me look....unbelievable. Thank you all,figured it would take longer than this, if ever. humbly blushing........scribbler

weirdelf

16 years ago

scribbler, don't be swayed by trendyness of free verse

Read a lot of poems by lonnie, on this site. He is a master of traditional verse and seldom loses an iota of meaning or content in the process. I'm not saying don't experiment with free verse, but don't regard it as a chore. Try writing poetic prose, break it into lines, edit it and voila! Excellent free verse! Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible, "the alleged short-cut to knowledge, which is faith, is only a short-circuit destroying the mind." [Ayn Rand, Atlas Shrugged]

scribbler

16 years ago

free verse

as i keep telling everyone,I did not intend for this to be taken as a serious attempt at free verse.I write in western classic because in taking time to develop rhyme and meter I am also forced to take time to be careful to choose words I think best suited to convey intended message and mood.Perhaps,if I grow bored with"classic",I'll venture into free verse again, but not any time soon.Thanks for feedback.......scribbler

xena465

16 years ago

Tee he, he...

The best I've read in ages Stan...so very funny and witty...I absolutely love it. I laughed all the way through, and I could actually imagine you having a good giggle when you were writing it…Did you? Rosina xena465

scribbler

16 years ago

anything once

AT LAST ! Someone gets that it was meant to only intended to have fun at own expense of a "western Classic" guy stumbling around trying something alien to himself.And yes I got a few chuckles myself.Glad it brought a smile to your face.....Stan

xena465

16 years ago

I don't think you should knock it Stan...

You've proved that you're talented in this area, and if I had your `Know-How` of the many different styles of poetry, I'd be in `Cloud-Nine`. I don't understand much about what type of poem I've produced when I write it, I just write it and hope that it makes sense; do you know what I mean? You come across to me as a bit of an expert, in this field, and I don’t think you should stick to one style…sounds like a comfort-zone to me Stan, if I can be so bold, respectively…still laughing at your poem…sorry, but I think it’s great…he, he, he. Rosina xena465

scribbler

16 years ago

anything

Rosina,I'm no expert in any type of poetry.Only formal training was part of one semester waaay back in high school.As for comfort zone,you got that right!What's wrong with that?I see so many poets who think writing a rhyme would make their head explode,I don't mind counterbalancing that.I'm still amazed at number of people who took poem for more than it was!(or am I taking it for less? ha!ha!) Thanks for understanding.......Stan P.S.Should I change pen name to Prof.Scribbler? HA!HA!

raj

16 years ago

“WELL BEGUN IS HALF

"WELL BEGUN IS HALF DONE"...for someone like you who is at ease with classics it should be easy enough but then as you have said it is a sattire so i believe there was a deliberate attempt to make it out as if from a novice...keep at it ..why stick to one form?..afterall variety is the spice of life... warmly ...raj (sublime_ocean)/

scribbler

16 years ago

anything once

Thank you so much for taking time to read and comment.It was from a novice "free verse" writer.As to sticking to one form, I'm a "classic" guy because sometimes it makes me sweat bullets(see my response to weirdelf) amazed at response....scribbler

lou

16 years ago

Original

I like your approach lou x