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Light as a Feather

the silence pressed
at the windows
and every touch
was fleeting

anger lived
in a blooded heart
as forgiveness
troubled thoughts

all it took ?
was one finger
a loose bra strap

and one tear

I am such a push over

— Seren, May 20, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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C

CyberSpace

16 years ago

thank god you are a pushover

thank god you are a pushover or I would be fucked LMFAO wicked woman you are love hubby xoxoxoxoxoxox
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

dont you be too cocky boyo

dont you be too cocky boyo hahaha I will tell what a fraud you were lmfao ~! love ya glad you liked it Wifey giggle lol x x x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
judyanne

judyanne

16 years ago

i am so still laughing

at that last line.xxx i so so love this jc just a thought 'all it took ? was one finger a loose bra strap and one tear' lose the 'was' or the '?' - i prefer that you lose the 'was' big hugs judd xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Judd

Its true its a known fact around here I am quick to anger but even quicker to forgive big softy I am lol ... I will take a look at the 'was' in the edits hun I am near asleep here, had a huge day helped a friend with some music and I am stuffed havent done that much in ages love and big hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Licia

Thanks for the comment sorry to be late answering been down for the count the last couple of days but I am back lol ... and the easy part lol only applies to one person hahahaha ;) thanks for the lovely comment love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
xena465

xena465

16 years ago

He, he, JayCee

So funny. It reminds me of 1970's/80's at the disco's when a guy would slip his hand up my back and losen my bra, and get a big Wollop (slap) for doing it. Rosina xena465
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Rosina

there was a boy in my science class who used to undo bra straps lol he only did it to me once Smile ... hahaha you can imagine the rest he he he big smile thanks for the read and the comment its much appreciated love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years ago

Apparently no one needs a

Apparently no one needs a push-up bra. ;-) ~ "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dearest Mum

the one thing ive never needed in fact lol hope your both well ~!thanks for the read love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
P

pleiades

16 years ago

love it! so concise, so

love it! so concise, so clever in its paucity of words. your opening stanza is brilliant... yes, i mean brilliant, and the rest of this write is just so clever my only suggestion... all it took ? was one finger a loose bra strap and one tear maybe lose the 'was' in the second line. it seems redundant after the question mark in the preceding line brava, p
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear P

I am sorry I havent got round to answering your PM I have been ill the last two weeks and only just coming good I am answering all my messages this afternoon so please dont think I had forgotten ... thanks for the read I am so happy you liked it, Judd suggested the same thing with the 'was' will have a look at it when I do an edit in the next couple of weeks love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
P

pleiades

16 years ago

don’t fret for one

don't fret for one second about not responding to my pm if you do, you do... if you don't,you don't... i don't get offended by silence. hope you're feeling much betterer now! p.
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear P

I have been very slack here the last couple of weeks as I have a few projects on the burners and had my hands full and then I had gotten behind with messages ... but I do apologise I am normally prompt answering just havent had the energy ... I am slowly coming good thanks (hugs) love JayCee x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")