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HUNTER'S LUCK

I guess I had no luck today
  no antlered monarch came my way
  to make breath catch and heartbeat pound
  my prey was nowhere to be found

My vigil started 'fore sunrise
  and ended with dark ,starry skies
  embedded in fall woods' embrace
  not moving from my vantage place

I got to see the break of dawn
  and saw the forest come awake
  I saw the dusky curtain drawn
  all as if for my own sake

Up in the air ,so way up high
  a pair of hawks danced in the sky
  they uttered out a high-pitched screech
  so far beyond my yearning reach

As my eyes returned to ground
  a scruffy coyote came around
  and as he turned his gaze toward me
  I didn't move, he didn't see

Throughout the day I saw the flocks
  of geese and doves and turkeys pass
  and even saw a few woodcocks
  who launched themselves from marshy grass

I think I may have even dozed
  until a distant truck door closed
  to awaken me in time
  to watch the evening sun's decline

The things you see and hear alone
  while in the woods far from a phone
  are never glimpsed by hurried faces
  while going through their hectic paces

And as the sun set behind me
  'twas nowhere else I'd rather be
  than in this lonesome, distant place
  surrounded by creation's grace

I guess I had no luck today
  I'm glad that it turned out that way
— scribbler, May 19, 2010

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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scribbler

16 years ago

hunter

A person who spends enough time hunting soon realizes that what matters is the time outdoors,not the trigger pull.Thank you for your continued willingness to read my scribbles.....Stan
xena465

xena465

16 years ago

Brilliant Stan

You're such a great poet. I love your flow and descriptions...so vivid...love it. Just a couple of things... In stanza 2/4 and 9...needs a space on one of the lines. {Forrest} should be [Forest] Rosina xena465
S

scribbler

16 years ago

spacing

WE should form a mutual admiration society HA!Did you mean a space after each comma? Appreciate all suggestions.....Stan
xena465

xena465

16 years ago

Yes Stan

A space is needed after commas. Rosina xena465
xena465

xena465

16 years ago

Dear Stan

Just a wee example of the importance of spacing on this line... and ended with {dark,starry} skies ...without a space, it becomes one word, darkstarry, with the space, it becomes [dark, starry] x Rosina xena465