Kailashana

May 17, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

like Gods, dreaming

i planted a seed
of You
inside the fertile soil
of my mind
You became rooted
deep into my heart
and i grew wings

I encircle the world now
joined
like wave to sea
like sky to earth
like love

we are Avatars here,
like gods we fly,
dreaming.....

— Kailashana, May 17, 2010

Critiques

theladyblue

16 years 2 months ago

Anna...

This is really beautiful and simple. As much as I love the simplicity of it I still feel like I want more out of it. Maybe its just because I love your language usage here I cant really tell...it just seems unfinished. <3 Emarie "i read you and see…that between the pen, paper and you…there is little room for me…" ~ heart breaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

Kailashana

16 years 2 months ago

Dreams….are our dreams

Dreams....are our dreams ever *finished*? And so it is that we each write our endings and have not ending that we can write of. Thanks for reading Emarie. ~A "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta

theladyblue

16 years 2 months ago

Always a pleasure Anna...

I hope you awake happy :) <3 Emarie "i read you and see…that between the pen, paper and you…there is little room for me…" ~ heart breaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dearest Mum

If a heart could sing for a poem mine would have for this one ... there is something so simple in its message that goes deep for me ... sorry had a rough bitch of a day love to you darlin hope you are loving each other love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Kailashana

16 years 2 months ago

My Dear J-C. Perhaps in

My Dear J-C. Perhaps in reponse to Emarie... it goes beyond Barry and I, love extends to you and yours, his and hers and theirs; us and them, our world and the universe. In this we are Oneness, personified. ~ "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta

Lonnie

16 years 2 months ago

Simply Breathtaking!

You have proven once again that your muse is hard at work and decisively driven! This is a very readable poem that will undoubtedly linger in many a memory!

Kailashana

16 years 2 months ago

It will? We’ll

It will? We'll see.... Thanks for reading and your kind remarks, Lonnie. ~ "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta

Lenny of Cohen

16 years 2 months ago

I thoroughly

enjoyed reading this excellently crafted poem. Love, Light and Laughter to All Beings Namaste, Lenny

Kailashana

16 years 2 months ago

Namaste, Lenny.May all

Namaste, Lenny. May all beings be free from suffering. ~A "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta

pleiades

16 years 2 months ago

is the uneven use of

is the uneven use of capitals in "i" and "You" in the first two stanzas deliberate? i have no problem with it as is, i'm just curious... this is beautiful A... simple...feeling...evocative all the hallmark greeting poems there are, cannot compete with eloquent, thoughtful words. cheers p

Kailashana

16 years 2 months ago

Yes. In love one melts into

Yes. In love one melts into the *other*... the i is You. ~A "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta

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