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as my mind slouches off ancient aggregates of consciousness
i wonder if my motives are pure
are they more than just a ploy
a plot to arouse feminine sensitivities
by the arts of fine-tuned terms and jargon
may i be allowed the transgression of
free expression as i window-dress
my intent with goldleaf and rummage through my mental dictionary
fit the soldered pipes and explosive concepts together
into a contraption which could kill or heal
all through the potency or inertness
of its components as they manipulate
sonic waves
the vibration of air as it
aids the subconscious in forming ideas
which bubble upwards in effervescent waves
lapping the cranium as its innards whir away
in frantic activity or
indifferent dozing
mandalas drawn into sandy plots of multicolored paths
which form concentric rings and intricate alleys
of a city of gods
which truly resides in the psyche and which forms a framework a structure

which, once completed, seamlessly flows from one

point to the next

a matrix within an enigma within a walnut shell

within the universe

meow

— Shango007, May 17, 2010

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magics02

16 years ago

I do moons how about you lol

Shang this is a brilliant write of yours. I know you don't do stars either so I shoot you the moon instead (laugh) and instead I nominate your poem. I feel are deserving more than stars and this one did it for me. You did a good job here and I hope for you to feel better soon. Love,Mona xoox Good choice of words used in your write here TIME well spent is TIME well lived I forget what are the shiny new things you give away? Send me some okay:)
Shango007

Shango007

16 years ago

The shiny new things are

The shiny new things are ideas... and if they are agreeable (AND true), I will give them away like gifts. I don't need fortune or fame. I play a mental game lol.. Thanks for the positive review...
M

magics02

16 years ago

Yes shiny new ideas

I love that expression you use. I like the way you write. Will visit more and stay true to yourself, agreeable and true that is:) Afterall James Bond was the real 007:) Love,Mona xoxoxo TIME well spent is TIME well lived
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Hello Shango

My favorite lines are: my intent with goldleaf and rummage through my mental dictionary fit the soldered pipes and explosive concepts together into a contraption which could kill or heal all through the potency or inertness of its components as they manipulate sonic waves I think it is a great write, but, my enjoyment was interrupted by the lower case "i" I is a reference to oneself and a proper noun. Always, Cat
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Shango

Thoroughly enjoyed the read ... thanks for sharing this one ... nothing to crit other than Cats suggestion which I thinks sound love and hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")