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HAULING HAY(back in the day)

Lets gather up a field of hay
  'twas cut the day 'fore yesterday
  now it's raked and in the bales
  and scattered out in grassy swales

I'll gather friends both hale and stout
  see if they want a good workout
  'cause we're all young and like to feel
  our muscles work like corded steel

And when the work becomes too hard
  we'll take a break in farmer's yard
  while sipping water cold and chill
  we know there's work to be done, still

So toss that bale and drive that truck!
  we may even make a buck
  the heat may soak us all with sweat
  we're young, it doesn't faze us yet

We'll joke, and jeer, and curse, and shout
  untill the field is emptied out
  and throw the bales through open door
  until the barn will hold no more

The sun's moved low
  we're almost done
  the shadows stretch
  o're work grown fun

Now lets get paid(not near enough)
  we won't complain or get all gruff
  at least we've got a bit to spend
  now that the day's work is at end

I'll call my girl and ask her out
  to eat and maybe drive about
  and talk about each other's day
  all as result of hauling hay
 
— scribbler, May 16, 2010

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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hippiepoet69

16 years ago

No Thanks

LOL. My hands are messed up now for hauling hay. I always got the job of stacking on the truck or trailer. Then in the barn. I was not strong. But I had good balance on a moving trailer. And I was a good stacker. I should of been smart enough to stink at it. But it was fun. That was back in my hayday. Take Care. huey
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scribbler

16 years ago

hay

Time sometimes adds a patina to what at the time was just plain hard work.ha!ha! The poem was meant to focus on the comradeship and joy of strength shared in younger years,which has been lost to mechanization in latter days. Thanks for sharing your memory. Stan
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magics02

16 years ago

Hey Scribe

It's only me dont get excited Lol and I really liked the flow of this one and the image it presented my mind this time. Sounds like fun, time for a hay ride you think. Okay on a more serious light note, there are two ll's in until and lasst line (hauling) hay The other sentence I got tongue twisted was the Now that the day's work's at an end maybe should flow like this perhaps, Now that the days work's at the end. I am tired now and will revisit this one again, and you know I am telling you I love this poem, and the small little tweaks of course me have to squeaks:) Just me lending a hand here to help you out and you are doing great with the rhyming also, Love,Mona xoxoxo TIME well spent is TIME well lived
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scribbler

16 years ago

hay

Believe it or not,I actually DO review before submitting.ha!ha!I guess when I look them over ,I read what I meant instead of what's there.Glad you enjoyed it and look forward to future critiques. sloppily ,Stan
xena465

xena465

16 years ago

Dear Stan

I love this write and it looks so much better in stanzas. There's just one line that sounds a little forced...rhyme-wise... And when the work becomes too hard we’ll take a break in farmer’s yard while sipping water cold and chill we know there’s work to be done still ...[this line] You need a space in this line too... We’ll joke,{and} jeer, and curse, and shout PS Thanks for sticking up for me Stan x Rosina xena465
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scribbler

16 years ago

hay

Perhaps place"we know there's work to be done still"in().Felt that I was standing up for all of us(including weirdelf)not to be spoken to rudely.Thanks for continuing support......Stan......just spotted typo in my reply ha!ha!
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shirley harrison

16 years ago

wonderful poem

Do you drive your girl around in a tractor? L:O:L only teasing we work with grape vines here and for sure its really hard work! this poem was visual to me so great write! Much love shirley harrison
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scribbler

16 years ago

hay

Hard work ,but satisfying!thanks Shirley