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Breezing Through a Dream

Breezing Through a dream..

I feel the breeze from a thousand dreams,
sweeping clear into my mind as if by chance.
Swirling in continually on perpetuating reams,
taking me in and on, an everlasting romance.
I dreamt of a dancer who danced upon her rage,
another the gambler who played with sleight of hand.
None had known the other, she was only half his age,
his face river boat hard, city quick when in command.

The devil smiled each time the gambler split a deck,
his work being driven home as cards were dealt.
A smile became a leer, as the gambler would check,
that his gun was loaded, or how good the cards felt.
As a dancer on her stage, she had no equal,
she had forged her style in the fire of tormented hell .
Each step and pirouette to her, easy to recall,
but when her curtain closed, then did her shell

She had dreamt of stardom, bright lights and fame,
he would gamble for money, at tables with poor light.
Neither knew that fate had now taken up the game,
he would play a dead hand, it was her last night.

The air was still and sticky, the first time they met,
the gambler had found a table, at the club Retro.
She had went on stage with a brand new routine set,
the devil he was working, would he steal the show.
The word cheat cut the air, the gambler made to stand,
the man who used this word, was deadly with his gun.
He’d come to kill the gambler, so now he played his hand,
the gambler saw him reach, and knew that he was done. 

He cleared the holster, knowing he was to late,
she had spun and flown, then left the stage at pace.
 He would meet his angel, in death his perfect mate,
she escaped her shell, as a bullet ends her grace.

Two souls left the bodies, clutching each other tight, 
as a gambler he'd know, meeting her was his best odds. 
Freed from her torment she at once felt it was right,
in hell or heaven, they were to be as gods..
 
A thousand words on the breeze of time,
passing through the poets rhyme…
— Roscoe Lane, May 16, 2010

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Region, Country: Scotland, Ayrshire land of Burns.., GBR

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Professor Purple

Professor Purple

16 years ago

Very, very nice! It’s like

Very, very nice! It's like I knew fairly quickly how it would end but didn't want it to end that way. A few details though: "slight of hand. Non had known " - I think it's "sleight of hand", and none is missing its "e". "equal"-"recall" is the only "weak" rhyme, I think it could be changed. One more thing, though it's a matter of personal taste: some lines seem to be "missing" a syllable. If that's a conscious decision then OK, maybe I didn't get the rhythm right. Otherwise you could add one-syllable words. An example: "but when her curtain closed, (so) then did her shell " On the whole a very pleasant read! Please keep on dreaming, but wake up once in a while to share your dreams with us! Antoine
xena465

xena465

16 years ago

Superb Roscoe

I felt like I was watching a great Western film in poetry form...fabulous. I love the last stanza...`mind boggling`. It felt like the gamblers Heaven was another gamble. Rosina xena465