Seren

May 15, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

A Chant of Time

I chanted for a mystery
to be unveiled
the cotton of time

frayed

I was allowed
to see, but only
the meager
slices of a moment

cherished

I watched
weathered hands
plucking comets
from the sky
as they were laid
in her eyes

awestruck

as white sage
from heaven
was woven in her hair
coffee from Havana
shear layered
on her skin

now shimmer

the gentle bare
from winds
that course
under her feet

the spectacular

that I was witness

Goddess
of my creation.

— Seren, May 15, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

CyberSpace

16 years ago

fucking orsm poem,

fucking orsm poem, speechlessly brilliant my love hubby xoxoxoxoxox

Seren

16 years ago

thanks heaps for the comment love wifey x x x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

xena465

16 years ago

Your words...

They just flow from your tender nature and always create a masterpiece JayCee. Rosina xena465

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Rosina

awww thats a lovely thing to say thanks so much I am glad you liked it just noticed a typo lol fixed now love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Kailashana

16 years ago

Imo, darling djaughter..that

Imo, darling djaughter.. that I was witness Goddess of my creation. Brilliant poem. Love, Mum "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta

Seren

16 years ago

Dearest Mum

I learnt a long time ago that to not listen is at my own expense (hugs) that ending was giving me hell thanks for the help it was much appreciated tonight I was redoing it till I was mental bloody stoked you liked it though (((hugs))) love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x x x x mwah ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Kailashana

16 years ago

Cant in time or is it a

Cant in time or is it a Chant in time? "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta

Seren

16 years ago

I actually had something

I actually had something similar to start with so I will think on it ... hmmmm but chant in time is good gotta make up my mind, getting a bit tired will do it in the next couple of days .... thanks for all the help with this one I was struggling a little tonight love you ma Jayne-Chloe x x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Raven

Big Smile so happy you liked it ... this ones is a little laid back I've been writing some different stuff while i was gone looking forward to getting some posted ... the word cant is also a verb meaning :- tilt, angle, overturn, slant,lean,tip,incline .... and I mean it in the sense A slant in time that could have been another name for this one thanks so much for the comment its much appreciated love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x

judyanne

16 years ago

as usual

i applause love and hugs judd xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Judd

Thanks for the applause this one was edited a few times before I got it right had a bit of a struggle with the ending ... love to you and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

shirley harrison

16 years ago

wow JC

Stunning poetry as usual, i am going to bow look! JC i just wanted to say you are a really great person on Neo you always have time for every one and i for one appreciate you very much! Much love shirley harrison

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Shirley

So happy you liked this one hun, and thanks for the lovely compliment I am speechless I think you made me blush, cause I can be a evil wench lol .. but I try to help when I can hun, when I came here I was a little scared of contacting anyone but I hope I can make people comfortable to be able to talk about whatever problem arises ... makes me feel good knowing I can help in some small way love to you dear lady big smiles from down under Jayne-Chloe x x x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Nordic cloud

16 years ago

I second Shirley here dearest Jayne

Ann of Norway And this with all its imagery that conjures up in my mind things not seen before, which fascinate and fix our perception like sewing needles pricking our intelligence to dance on thin cotton thoughts, and falling through the holes have experienced a metamorphosis of ideas so brilliant and exciting that we are in awe indeed. Jayne Chloe. "the cotton of time frayed" "the meager slices of a moment" "plucking comets  from the sky   as they were laid  in her eyes" "as white sage   from heaven  was woven in her hair  coffee from Havana  shear layered  on her skin now shimmer" " ...bare  from winds" Oh I might as well have copied the whole poem out!!!! Love to you and your snake, and all you do may it be fired by this wonderful visionary power of poetry. Your Ann.

Seren

16 years ago

Dearest Ann

You make my heart dance in your beautiful words everytime ... words that can always pick me up when I need a dust off ... thanks so much my darlin friend ... your a staunch friend we call it here in australia its one of the highest compliments you can give a close friend and ... you always lift my spirits you always dust me off with a smile, and make me feel like everythings ok in the world again ... for that I can never repay your friendship ... thats why I wrote this one for you lol I was hoping you would read it and you did ... now I can dedicate it to you ... love you darlin thanks for always being there hope one day I can repay the favour love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x x this ones for you and the one I am posting tonightd for someone else lol I been busy thinking about all my friends and how they have been there for me your poem was the first one finished (((hugs))) ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Nordic cloud

16 years ago

Oh what do I see here? Dearest Jayne Chloe

Ann of Norway Oh sweet words that curl like seagulls flying across the miles of ocean, full of emotions swaying, eddying to the tides, those tides that can denote the notes of friendship, wildly dancing in the sun of warm embraces, kisses, happy faces, their aura glows, is fixed in orbit round my brain, a halo like a magic crown unseen by some, and yet you now bestow on me such grace, such flow of words, such metaphors, such similes that grab my mind and weave new clothes to don when I feel low or sad and there transform me into Ann so glad to know a person like yourself, not on the shelf of daily drudge, but polished newly loved and placed on tables fit for Kings and Queens, to contemplate and try to understand. Give me your hand Jayne Chloe, and we will dance and sing a song so long as we can win the warmth of day and feel replenished when we're down, its nature's way to clothe the day in coloured banners, arts, flowers, fountains, spray the world with joyful union when two souls find solace, love and then become companions in this pall of pain and sorrows, we dismiss them and look forward to tomorrows.

Seren

16 years ago

Dearest friend

Your verse graces my page and it folds time around us both, together through words we will always be together ... I am so touched by your comment I was near to speechless and came back ... love you dearheart your a beautiful person (((((((((((((((((hugs)))))))))))))))) Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Nordic cloud

16 years ago

Oh how we wish, how we wish!!!!!

Ann of Norway Oh how we would turn the clock and dissipate your troubles, chase away the pain and the anguish they create, and Joe's too, and many others; our lives pale compared in courage and determination to fight and rise above the dreads and sorrows that must tug at you every day now, Joe has written a wonderful poem about Kindness, he too understands better than most, sadly; and yet here we are enjoying your creativity and that is such a joyful thing, we revel in your words of wisdom and delightful play of thoughts, they give so much, as Joe too does, to us, that this power of beauty MUST soothe you despite all the hardship of the problems. The essence of feeling is enhanced as discord does accord, and the music that you both produce will sing in our ears and others long after we have left this earth and think of that! A choir that never ceases to inspire, between the pages of a book, they will jump out and accost with their keen riposte at life's vicissitudes, and give such calm to those again in distress, and to those with enough compassion to understand their messages and enjoy their beauty. You are worth the trouble, you and Joe and all those who suffer here on Neopoets we send our kind and gentle sympathy, and think and feel with you and hope that that gives a slight joy within the devilish fiends of evil illness. Away with them they cannot win, we shall . YES. Love you dear Jayne Chloe. Ann

Seren

16 years ago

I justy broke down crying

I justy broke down crying darlin I will answer you in a while ... thats the loveliest thing I think anyone has ever said to me love you dear one jaycee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

lou

16 years ago

Great

Great read Seren i especially liked this stanza I watched weathered hands plucking comets from the sky as they were laid in her eyes Lou xx

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Lou

thats also my favourite stanza thanks for the read hun... love and hugs Jayne-Chloe ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Geezer

16 years ago

I'm late...

But had I known such wonderful words awaited my eyes, I would have crawled from my slumber of illness, to send my reply. Been working backwards from your latest, ~ higger bugs, ~ Gee

Seren

16 years ago

Dearest Gee

You made a tired mind smile tonight thanks for that comment huni ... this ones got a special meaning for me and I will share it with you one day ;)lol love and big hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")