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hippiepoet69
May 14, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Do I Give Too Much

 do I give too muchdo I love too strongdo I lose touchwhere do I go wrong do I try to takewhat just isn't theredo I try to makea burden to bare do I open my heartand give my soulto be torn apartI can't take the toll do I walk awayand never knowor do I staywith nothing to show do I take a chancethat I will be a foolthat I can't danceto some unwritten rule in the end, I give myselfas she knew I wouldwill she put me on a shelfbecause she knew she could to be at her beck and callcheer her up, when she's downpick her up, if there's a fallmake her laugh, be a clown even fools get wisewhen they count their costbreak  away from tiesas they cut their loss Copyright   5-13-10   huey horton   (hippiepoet69)     
— hippiepoet69, May 14, 2010

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xena465

xena465

16 years ago

Nice one Huey

When treated like that, it's best to cut your losses and run. Rosina xena465
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hippiepoet69

16 years ago

Thanks Zina

I have my running shoes on. But I give it a little longer. There is a special bond and history between us.She calls me 3 or 4 times a day some days. I think she has always been affraid of my love. Thanks Zina. huey
Alice Ember

Alice Ember

16 years ago

Nice write

I've had to pick up my friends who have run just like your going to. I hope your okay. With all my irish luck going your way Alice Cowards aren't the only ones who die a thousand deaths. Sometimes heroes do to
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hippiepoet69

16 years ago

Thanks Alice

If I run again. I will be bumed out for awhile. But I will be OK. Just think of all the great poetry I will write. haha She has inspired my poems for 30 years and counting. I have never unloved anyone. Take Care. huey
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magics02

16 years ago

Greaat one here Huey

You sure blew this to the ceiling and I no you don't do stars but I can not give you moons and you are a lovely man with a heart of gold worth more then any stars glow. I just have to tell you I am impressed with this one and it left me with the same thoughts as you have here. Love You dear friend Never give up the Hope:) Mona xoxoxo TIME well spent is TIME well lived
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hippiepoet69

16 years ago

Thanks Mona

You and others on here have inspired me to use my talent. I have always had the talent. But I can get lazy and just write it the first way it pops into my mind. I've been working it lately. But for the most part. I still write like I did when I was 16. I have not given up yet. I know she always wants us to be friends. I don't think I can be just friends. I can never let her know about this site. LOL I wrote two more yesterday. Thanks for all the kind words. Take Care. huey
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shirley harrison

16 years ago

i think your attitude to others stinks

you dont give stars so well i give you 1 great poem you always seem to speak about you self but i think its time you thought of others and not just of the women in your dream! this is not a sight for fraud you know give something back and stop annoying shirley harrison
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hippiepoet69

16 years ago

I'm Sorrow

if I come across like that. I try to give back. It's not that I don't like stars. I hate the abuse of them. Just giving them out freely. They should be earned. Very few poems should get five stars. Even if a poem was mechanicly perfect. If it does not rnvolk emotions in me. It would not get five stars. A very flawed poem that make me laugh or cry. Would rate higher with me. I will tone it down about me. Thanks. Take Care. huey
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magics02

16 years ago

comments

I am not getting in between you and Hippie poet but you must know by now alot of people on here do not use the star system. ALOT I think hippiepoet is being courteous and letting others know. At least he comments on poems, some dont even bother to do that. This is his poem and you speak of fraud where is that coming from. We like to respect each other as writers and readers of art. I am not coming between you two as I don't know what prompted this and I did not mean to barge in here, but I found this comment a bit off. Hippie does not have to give me stars or anyone else here for that matter, it is the acknowledgement and critique of the poem and the contents, not the poet. Peace Mona
hobo

hobo

16 years ago

sometimes my friend

sometimes my friend they just don't want the one who would be best for them that would treat them better than anyone else ever would. nice write
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hippiepoet69

16 years ago

Thanks Hobo

I know. And I will back way off if she just wants me for a friend. Say hello to the Northwest for me. I was in Oregon and Montana last Summer. I was born in Eugene. I love the Northwest. Take Care. huey
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shirley harrison

16 years ago

Hippy Poet

I apoligize to you, someone else rubbed me up the wrong way last night and i took it out on you,i know you do not give stars and i dont care but to highlight it every time you make your comment is unnessasary. Please forgive me as i was well out of order. I love your poetry and will continue to give you comments as for this one its defanately a five! shirley harrison
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hippiepoet69

16 years ago

It's Cool

don't worry about it. We all have bad days. I sure do. I let people know I don't use stars. Where they don't think that yhier poem didn't even rate one star. Most of my poems are wrote with deep emotions. None are wrote just for the sake of I need to write a poem. So there is a story behind every poem. I guess I just need to keep tidbits of the story to myself. Thanks and I still count you as my friend. Take Care. huey
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shirley harrison

16 years ago

Hippie poet

Thank you i feel so sorry for taking my anger out on you. this week has been bad on neo for me and last night i just cracked after an unfortunate incident, you do not have to tone anything down please just be your self its me that was really terrible and so thank you for your forgiveness. and i know exactly where your poems come from thats why i love your work as it is written from your heart. Much love To you Hippie poet shirley harrison
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hippiepoet69

16 years ago

Smile Shirley

Most of the time your comments on mine and others give me a chuckle. We all need to keep in mind that words can cut deep. But I have so much going through my mind right now. This didn't bother me.So smile and lets move on. Take Care. huey
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shirley harrison

16 years ago

well take no notice of mine please

I didnt mean it. it was not you i was angry with and i am always so sorry to you! I promise to give you more chuckles in the future and it was a cyber attack so i guess better than a heart attack that i had last night! shirley harrison