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weirdelf
weirdelf
May 14, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

To Her

as peaches in the sun
we turn our faces to joy
all shadows leave

a gentle breeze flows across us   
I offer my hands, open
our friendship, as a dream
flies across a space that evaporates
with the heat of hearts
sharing, understanding

why wake from a dream
that is not shuttered by sleep?
Is there illusion
in souls shared?
So waking or sleeping
untethered
something new and precious is born
— weirdelf, May 14, 2010

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Region, Country: Sydney, Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: The Romantics, The Mersey Sound, The Beats and, of course, The Bard

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weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years ago

thanks lou

Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible, "the alleged short-cut to knowledge, which is faith, is only a short-circuit destroying the mind." [Ayn Rand, Atlas Shrugged]
judyanne

judyanne

16 years ago

beautiful jess

nice to see the romantic come out in you i especially love 'So waking or sleeping untethered something new and precious is born' - beautiful love judy xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years ago

ta jetz

Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible, "the alleged short-cut to knowledge, which is faith, is only a short-circuit destroying the mind." [Ayn Rand, Atlas Shrugged]
chumfin

chumfin

16 years ago

is my friend in love?

i really love and like this aspect of you. that goodness for the change. best regards my friend. chumfin
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years ago

[smiles] glad you like the aspect,

but it is an aspect always present, not a change in me, Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible, "the alleged short-cut to knowledge, which is faith, is only a short-circuit destroying the mind." [Ayn Rand, Atlas Shrugged]
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years ago

I suppose the answer is ever

I suppose the answer is ever and always yes, when poets know love. ;-) Deliriously happy! ~A "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years ago

when poets know love

expect the best... or the very worst, Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible, "the alleged short-cut to knowledge, which is faith, is only a short-circuit destroying the mind." [Ayn Rand, Atlas Shrugged]
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years ago

that can only be answered in person

there are certain intangibles that can just never be communicated through chat, phone or even poetry, Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible, "the alleged short-cut to knowledge, which is faith, is only a short-circuit destroying the mind." [Ayn Rand, Atlas Shrugged]
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Jess

Your peaches took me back to another time ... Jess I am literally gobsmacked in the beauty of your write ... I never expect a love poem for myself(from anyone i mean) ... but I can live voraciously off others poetry and pretend that they are for me I just sat here and reread it three times trying to find fault or offer some suggestion ... sorry hun perfection shouldnt be fucked with imho love ya Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years ago

my pleasure in your voracious

[did you mean vicarious? 8) either is fine] pleasure is only exceeded by my pleasure in ours. And somewhat exceeds my pleasure in messing with people's preconceptions of me. Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible, "the alleged short-cut to knowledge, which is faith, is only a short-circuit destroying the mind." [Ayn Rand, Atlas Shrugged]
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Big smile I meant Voracious

Big smile I meant Voracious ... I know greedy but hey no ones ever written me a poem like this Its my sin and am going to hell cause I allow it lol ;) Hugs JayCee x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

16 years ago

Jess

"why wake from a dream that is not shuttered by sleep?" I have serious line envy now. I hope you're happy. LOL Excellent poem, no fault to find, no measure of enjoyment too small; this after my fifth read, soaking it in. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years ago

thank you indeed, jim

I am honoured by your appreciation, especially since this is a content I have tended to avoid, and often urge others to! Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible, "the alleged short-cut to knowledge, which is faith, is only a short-circuit destroying the mind." [Ayn Rand, Atlas Shrugged]
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Lonnie

16 years ago

Better Late than Never!

I just now discovered this gem! Now I truly know why you are what you are and do what you do so very well! You may be well on your way to becoming Australia's version of Shakespeare! Great poem, my friend!
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years ago

goodness gracious me!

that's the second time I've been compared to the Bard. v1.0 always has glitches, v2.0 due for release soon, thanks mate, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible, "the alleged short-cut to knowledge, which is faith, is only a short-circuit destroying the mind." [Ayn Rand, Atlas Shrugged]
P

pleiades

16 years ago

why wake from a dreamthat

why wake from a dream that is not shuttered by sleep? those lines had me turning all shades of green... a gentle, feeling write. i don't want to go all mushy here (bah! humbug!) but i see a rather pure beauty in this write. i think it's in the open-ness; in the willingness to be vulnerable. i so like this... cheers p
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years ago

thankyou, I’m not such a

thankyou, I'm not such a jaded old bastard as many think, that vulnerability, the frisson of the unexpected and uncertain still delights me in a new friendship, Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible, "the alleged short-cut to knowledge, which is faith, is only a short-circuit destroying the mind." [Ayn Rand, Atlas Shrugged]
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years ago

I, for one, know Jess well

I, for one, know Jess well enough to know he is in no way, shape or form, in any such manner *a jaded old bastard*. A shaman lives the truth of his/her life as it appears, it may appear to be in the fashion to some. However, he's like I am, or I'm like he is... we need a lover to round off our hard edge. Well, ok, at least I speak for me, if not for Jess. ;-) ~A "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years ago

I, for one, know Jess well

I, for one, know Jess well enough to know he is in no way, shape or form, in any such manner *a jaded old bastard*. A shaman lives the truth of his/her life as it appears, it may appear to be in the fashion to some. However, he's like I am, or I'm like he is... we need a lover to round off our hard edge. Well, ok, at least I speak for me, if not for Jess. ; ~A
P

pleiades

16 years ago

a lover to round off the

a lover to round off the hard edges?... that sounds like a fair call (and a bit like a line for a poem!) cheers p
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years ago

I loved this, very open and

I loved this, very open and reflective. Almost vulnerable. My what has got in to you lately! I think I like it. Very excellant read Jess. Much enjoyed. No suggestions either. Julie D.D.
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years ago

What has got into me?

I think I've got a pretty good answer for that. I've met a person who has become a dear friend quite quickly on Neopoet, mona from Libya, and the frisson of vulnerability and excitement of makeing a new friend has caused me to shed some of the defensive shells I have built up while battling the god-bothering "nice crowd" and their vicious attacks. Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible, "the alleged short-cut to knowledge, which is faith, is only a short-circuit destroying the mind." [Ayn Rand, Atlas Shrugged]
loved

loved

16 years ago

lovely poem

Now I know It will take centuries, If not many a millennium, To reach the barbed wired Surroundings of the periphery, Where you stand commemorating To time Your indelible poetry... But do let me read, If not directly, But at least your poetic thoughts, As a reflection In the oasis of time, As I thirst for words, As come So naturally to thee
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years ago

I don’t believe I’ve

I don't believe I've ever had such a self indulgent, irrelevant wank of a comment on one of my poems. Poem callingg....bzzzzbzzzbzz poem calling bzzzbzzzbzzz Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible, "the alleged short-cut to knowledge, which is faith, is only a short-circuit destroying the mind." [Ayn Rand, Atlas Shrugged]
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Rich-The-Poet

15 years 11 months ago

not bad,,nice

not bad,,nice form,,different,.
SS

soulful spirit

15 years 10 months ago

sweet verse indeed...

Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood... T.S Eliot Hi Jess, Mona recommended this poem for me and I must be thankful, enjoyable read and indeed penned so well... A close friend once wrote me acrostic using my screen name, it was a very nice gift, I'm pretty sure such gentle thing would treasure any true friendship. Regards