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May 14, 2010
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I am immortal
Seeing you walking down our beach
Sends chills up my spine
The sunset is behind you
Because nothing comes before you
The warmth of your soul
Puts the sparkle in your eyes
The tenderness of your way
Puts the smile on my face
When you speak
I listen
When you sing
I dream
When you touch my face
I am weak
When you tell me you love me
I am strong
When you kiss my lips
I am immortal
— hobo, May 14, 2010
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Critiques
jetz
16 years ago
This is positively
hobo
16 years ago
Thank you
theladyblue
16 years ago
Stunning...
hobo
16 years ago
Wow
anonymous1
16 years ago
Awesome
hobo
16 years ago
Thank you Lisa
anonymous1
16 years ago
Oh Geez...
judyanne
16 years ago
wonderful write randy
lou
16 years ago
Gorgeous
shirley harrison
16 years ago
was that written to me? L:O:L
hobo
16 years ago
its for you
shirley harrison
16 years ago
she's sitting next to me
magics02
16 years ago
Beautiful Hobo
hobo
16 years ago
50 stars
hippiepoet69
16 years ago
Beautiful!
shirley harrison
16 years ago
you dont do stars!
jetz
16 years ago
Forgive me Hobo/Randy for hijacking your poem for a minute
shirley harrison
16 years ago
Hobo I am so sorry
Seren
16 years ago
Dear Randy
xena465
16 years ago
Gosh Hobo...
hobo
16 years ago
I wish
Roscoe Lane
16 years ago
A very gentle love poem,
magics02
16 years ago
Sure miss your presence in here Hobo