Beneath the leaves

I love the dark imagery Lou

I am a little behind on everyones writes but I just found this one of yours I will try and catch up in the coming days with all Ive missed ... sigh ... you have really took a step up and out in your writing, I can feel a totally different voice in this one ... I look forward to catching up on all ive missed but for you ? five a nomination for this one ... well done smiles you been working hard on your poetry and its showing love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

fine work, i especially like the snake references. the lines: I ask to speak - from ruinness lungs The verity drips - from serpents tongue perhaps you meant ruinous. and i might also change tongue to tongues as it follows better the line lungs. unless you meant the serpent's tongue, in which case you need to put in the comma. i especially liked the line: the verity drips, as it also echoes the image of the serpent's lips dripping with poison. very well done. you have a fine poem here. john