Tabula Rasa Moi

It is lonely hereOn the backside of foreverSwaying in the soft shoveOf waves breaking the shore In these timesI imagine I am the moonRevealing stark blue visionsOf life swirling on without my aid So easily forgettingThe adoration endured thereReaching out, I dig into the sandBegging it to remember my skin

— theladyblue, May 12, 2010

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Country/Region: USA

Critiques

poewriter58

16 years 2 months ago

Emarie

Outstanding as your writing always is. You have a wonderful way of wording your poems that I only wish I had half the talent it takes to write in this manner. So good to see you posting again. "on the backside of forever" love this line Chrys

theladyblue

16 years 2 months ago

Chrys

Thank you so much! I am flattered by your compliments! p.s. thats my fav line too :) <3 Emarie "i read you and see…that between the pen, paper and you…there is little room for me…" ~ heart breaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

hobo

16 years 2 months ago

backside of forever

Beautiful work my friend, I have been on the backside of forever and it is very lonely, very nice write my friend

theladyblue

16 years 2 months ago

Thank you :)

<3 Emarie "i read you and see…that between the pen, paper and you…there is little room for me…" ~ heart breaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

weirdelf

16 years 2 months ago

what can I say? Lovely, poignant, haunting,

great last line. As chrys said, you truly have the word-crafters gift, Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible, "the alleged short-cut to knowledge, which is faith, is only a short-circuit destroying the mind." [Ayn Rand, Atlas Shrugged]

theladyblue

16 years 2 months ago

Jess

takes one to know one :P <3 Emarie "i read you and see…that between the pen, paper and you…there is little room for me…" ~ heart breaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

Esker

16 years 2 months ago

la lune

Moon poetry always finds a place for me having been a watcher of its moods for many a year Esker~

theladyblue

16 years 2 months ago

Esker

like the moon I get lonely here in this crowded space and I too have my phases...I am new at the moment...changing behind the veil of darkness only to emerge piece by piece until I can be whole once more <3 Emarie "i read you and see…that between the pen, paper and you…there is little room for me…" ~ heart breaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

pleiades

16 years 2 months ago

killer last line (now i have

killer last line (now i have line envy...sheeeze) i think why i like your work, is because of how you use words i've read a number of your works this morning, and there seems to be a common theme of terrific use of words. similar to esker (the best here imo) you are able to take the ordinary, and elevate it. i love reading works where i can see the writer has taken time and care to use just the right word... place it in the exact spot it needs to go in for maxium impact i also love to see that the writer THINKS about how they want to say what they say. when i see that it's a precise art, that great care has been taken with intent and structure, it makes me appreciate what i'm reading even more i really, really like this miss blue, and how i wish that last line was mine cheers p

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