Tabula Rasa Moi

It is lonely hereOn the backside of foreverSwaying in the soft shoveOf waves breaking the shore In these timesI imagine I am the moonRevealing stark blue visionsOf life swirling on without my aid So easily forgettingThe adoration endured thereReaching out, I dig into the sandBegging it to remember my skin

— theladyblue, May 12, 2010

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Country/Region: USA

Critiques

poewriter58

16 years ago

Emarie

Outstanding as your writing always is. You have a wonderful way of wording your poems that I only wish I had half the talent it takes to write in this manner. So good to see you posting again. "on the backside of forever" love this line Chrys

theladyblue

16 years ago

Chrys

Thank you so much! I am flattered by your compliments! p.s. thats my fav line too :) <3 Emarie "i read you and see…that between the pen, paper and you…there is little room for me…" ~ heart breaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

hobo

16 years ago

backside of forever

Beautiful work my friend, I have been on the backside of forever and it is very lonely, very nice write my friend

theladyblue

16 years ago

Thank you :)

<3 Emarie "i read you and see…that between the pen, paper and you…there is little room for me…" ~ heart breaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

weirdelf

16 years ago

what can I say? Lovely, poignant, haunting,

great last line. As chrys said, you truly have the word-crafters gift, Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible, "the alleged short-cut to knowledge, which is faith, is only a short-circuit destroying the mind." [Ayn Rand, Atlas Shrugged]

theladyblue

16 years ago

Jess

takes one to know one :P <3 Emarie "i read you and see…that between the pen, paper and you…there is little room for me…" ~ heart breaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

Esker

16 years ago

la lune

Moon poetry always finds a place for me having been a watcher of its moods for many a year Esker~

theladyblue

16 years ago

Esker

like the moon I get lonely here in this crowded space and I too have my phases...I am new at the moment...changing behind the veil of darkness only to emerge piece by piece until I can be whole once more <3 Emarie "i read you and see…that between the pen, paper and you…there is little room for me…" ~ heart breaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

pleiades

16 years ago

killer last line (now i have

killer last line (now i have line envy...sheeeze) i think why i like your work, is because of how you use words i've read a number of your works this morning, and there seems to be a common theme of terrific use of words. similar to esker (the best here imo) you are able to take the ordinary, and elevate it. i love reading works where i can see the writer has taken time and care to use just the right word... place it in the exact spot it needs to go in for maxium impact i also love to see that the writer THINKS about how they want to say what they say. when i see that it's a precise art, that great care has been taken with intent and structure, it makes me appreciate what i'm reading even more i really, really like this miss blue, and how i wish that last line was mine cheers p