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infinite_dwarf
infinite_dwarf
May 12, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Good Samaritan



I met a man on a curb in town
his luck was bad, his countenance down
his smile killed by darkened frown
heart heavy like a wooden door



His eyes upturned to look at me
as I knelt upon one knee
and spoke to him with sympathy
for I had been there before

His face had turned a reddened hue
he dropped his eyes and said "thank you
'tis quite a kind thing for you to do"
and then was silent once more


He pondered what I had to say
as I got up to walk away
over my shoulder my glance did sway
and glimpsed the smile he was looking for








— infinite_dwarf, May 12, 2010

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Region, Country: North Carolina, USA, USA

Favorite Poets: E.A. Poe, Lewis Carroll, Charles Bukowski, Michael McClure, Lawrence Ferlenghetti.

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ziggy

16 years ago

hi there

hi i don`t know you but i like you style it reads well to me as i can picture the images this gives out nice write chat soon ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs ,,,second stanza would be my fav ,,,,,,,,,
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

16 years ago

Thanks, Zig!

I'm glad that you were able to visualize the words as you read them. I've run across some of your poetry, but to be honest, have not been on the site much as of late. I'll be sure to drop by your page soon. Thanks again! ~Jess K. ----------------------- "Life is the sun, and the show must go on and on; make it come true. Life is the sun, and the road goes on and on; paint this song any colour but blue." - Don Ross
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years ago

Sometimes a hand, a touch, a

Sometimes a hand, a touch, a word, a smile is all anyone needs. I'm not skilled in the art of rhyme, but for me the last sentence loses its beat somehow. Maybe--*I smiled the smile he was looking for*? ~A "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

16 years ago

I see what you mean

And knew the ending was weak. I was trying to work in something where he had found his own smile. Maybe something will strike me, and I can finish the write properly. ~Jess K. ----------------------- "Life is the sun, and the show must go on and on; make it come true. Life is the sun, and the road goes on and on; paint this song any colour but blue." - Don Ross