theladyblue

May 11, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

siren song

my heart breaksspilling over itself like snowthe feathers reignas I teethe my sadnessin pillowed talk take only what you mustI am vulgar and frail wade herein savage poolsof midnight oilwhere we wasted away

— theladyblue, May 11, 2010

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Critiques

Moshhalo

16 years ago

It amazes me how deep you

It amazes me how deep you are! You must be inspired by everything around you. Beautiful script!

theladyblue

16 years ago

inspiration is subjective...

this was acutally inspired by the nothingness of the mundane...but still i cant sleep...worried i may miss something worth experiencing...what can i say? its a chronic condition... i am very flattered that you read and commented...thank you :D <3 Emarie "i read you and see…that between the pen, paper and you…there is little room for me…" ~ heart breaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

Beauregard

16 years ago

Emarie!

It's so good to read from you again!! I miss you girl! 2.3: "teeth" --> 'teethe'? like when babies grow their first teeth, right? I think it would feel complete if "waste" on the last line was 'wasted'. I second Moshhalo, you write so deeply about something so simple, and in such a small space, it's astounding! Kelsey :)

theladyblue

16 years ago

My Dear Little Kelsey...

firstly I just adore your pic...reminds me of Joan Jett <3!!! I'm glad I got you around for edits :)...I think you would make an excellent editor!!! That is meant as a compliment, promise!!! OH and THANK YOU!!! <3 Emarie "i read you and see…that between the pen, paper and you…there is little room for me…" ~ heart breaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

Beauregard

16 years ago

you're welcome :)

I'm suffering from a bit of writer's block myself, so I joined the mentor program and am able to really expand my critique abilities, so the editor thing is definitely a compliment! Thank you! Are the little ones doing any better these days? I'm sure they're more than a handful! Kelsey

theladyblue

16 years ago

more than a handful...

is somewhat of an understatement...but they are good...Jaina is have a little issue with her hip and leg but she seems to be growing out of it...Dane and Londyn are in Taekwondo now so thats fun anyway I appreciate your help!!! as I always say...Im a writer not an editor...without me they would be jobless ^_^ <3 Emarie "i read you and see…that between the pen, paper and you…there is little room for me…" ~ heart breaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

weirdelf

16 years ago

I'm honoured to share these pages with you,

I sleep little away from here, knowing for a fact that I am missing great things. Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible, "the alleged short-cut to knowledge, which is faith, is only a short-circuit destroying the mind." [Ayn Rand, Atlas Shrugged]

theladyblue

16 years ago

Jess

It is I that am honored to share my work with such people who are both kind and brutially honest. Without the critiquing ability of a lot of people on this site I would still be writing what I call 'beginner poetry'. I feel like I have advanced so much since coming to Neopoet and I could not be more thankful for the friendships that have blossomed here. Thank you and get some sleep you crazy elf ;P <3 Emarie "i read you and see…that between the pen, paper and you…there is little room for me…" ~ heart breaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

pleiades

16 years ago

line 5… i keep reading

line 5... i keep reading it...i keep stumbling over "teethe" "as I thether my sadness"...makes more sense to me, in the context of the surrounding lines not a critisisim, just a thought a raw, open write, that greatly appeals to me. i think this is a really good example of less is more...no florid descriptors needed, no overblown emotion. contained, constrained...and quite powerful in its evocation cheers p

theladyblue

16 years ago

Pleiades...

I greatly appreciate your suggestion but for me thether is more of a mouthful in this particular placement. It is also a matter of personal preference because I tend to bite pillows and have been known to tear through one if angry or upset enough...Keeps me out of jail anyway :D I am so glad you stopped in though. I know you are a well respected poet here and it has been a while since I have read your work but I remember it well. <3 Emarie "i read you and see…that between the pen, paper and you…there is little room for me…" ~ heart breaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

pleiades

16 years ago

ye gads! a pillow

ye gads! a pillow biter! eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee...my teeth are on edge just thinking about it! i have this thing (no, it's not contagious) about material in my mouth...cannot stand it it's like fingernails on a blackboard...makes me cringe we all have our funny ways, don't we? i'm a rubber chewer...love love love the smell and taste of rubber i used to carry balloons in my pocket for a quick chew... cheers p

Esker

16 years ago

where

one of the great things about being around here long enough is to come and read poetry of poets and find stunning change Ladyblue this is poetry the kind that makes me sit up (amazing me still!) Esker~