Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

like a moth, like another spiral

do you see how the frond dances
in the gentle wind, baring its green light softly

between the tender bosom of sharp rock,
there on the climb uphill, tall

thin pines guarding lost memories? did
you wake up in the valley of the edelweiss when

the truth was walled and the narcissus stayed inside? did
you see the forest burning in my eyes? did

your heart allow you to be drained bleeding to
be alive in the sand, the desert of your hours that

formed the pathway to the stars your feet of gold, you
a statue or a slave to kings and queens, gods? did

you love me even then? I paint my lips with the blushing
youth of my longing,  I plait my hair with the silvering moon

lingering on my shoulders I surrender to the translucent
dawn of our perfection, I am drawn to you,  you

hover over me, spirits touching and music spilling
from your fingers, playing the melody of me, I am

silently drawn to you and you steal from me
my every breath. like a moth inside a spiral, temptation

breaks our soul in two. intermezzo tango raw blood,
bold, rich and blue, afire.




— Kailashana, May 11, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

More from this author

Critiques

D

Dalton

16 years ago

there is no comment i could

there is no comment i could make to improve this. formed the pathway to the stars your feet of gold,you a statue or a slave to kings and queens, gods? heavenly lines. john but i know you don't do it for the praise
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years ago

Thank you all for

Thank you all for reading....and your kindness. Hmm. Praise, Dalton? Does not each and every one of us need some positive feedback? Sort of like affirming that we're on the right track, so to speak and what we say/write has some *meaning* for the reader. Why post poems if no one cares, if no one reads them? However, I will always write as long as my muse bids me go on. There's an inherent dilemma here. No? And there seems to be a difference in belonging to a poetry group/workshop and writing because it's what one does. Sometimes it's one and the same. Sometimes not. I abhor insincerity and flattery. We all know that type of *praise*. Love, Anna "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta
CS

club special

16 years ago

Good God

Do you know how much talent is comprised within this poem? Tell me it took hours or days or months to write because I have not seen anything like this on this site... This poem is a beacon of enlightenment for me--Club Special I plait my hair on the silvering moon lingering on my shoulders?-- Wow. I am humbled. If I could give ten stars it would not be enough!