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Bonitaj
Bonitaj
May 11, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

A SAVAGE ENOUGH PILGRIMAGE*


Insouciantpolitenessinterspersed withimpromptu impatience smiles belieheartache,thwart further  engagement contoured indifferencesmudges dark fallowsforeigners must forsakenaive amazement unabashed wanderlustdefies containmenttravel is startling, savageentertainment  BjR  11 May '10


  *from DH Lawrence - a comment on his life.
— Bonitaj, May 11, 2010

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Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

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weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 2 months ago

I love this, but wish you hadn't put in the definition

of insouciant, especially with an asterisk in the poem. Don't pander to lazy morons who won't look up a dictionary. It's a distraction. The reference to Lawrence is the title? That is not clear since you use an asterisk on insouciant. All a bit messy there. The poem itself is grand, travel/life/journey, it all works. Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible, "the alleged short-cut to knowledge, which is faith, is only a short-circuit destroying the mind." [Ayn Rand, Atlas Shrugged]
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 2 months ago

oops!

upside the head! You're right - thanks Jess - will attend to it all in the morning ;) Boni

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