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My Birth Child


My birth child, is who you are
my son, my ever loving star
You are growing up so fast now
I look at you, seeing you once a toddler
your beaming eyes gazing upon me
Once a little son, now you turn to manhood
my eyes blur for a second or two
Is that really you there
My how you've grown, that smile, that hug
the good morning, the good night kisses


 

My birth child is who you are
my son, my everloving star
My hopes for your future, mom's best wish
I'll always feel this way for you son
Wanting you to be happy
healthy, prosperous
kind, gentle, loving, caring
steadfast. Never to give up
For all your dreams you hold in your heart
Plans of your future of love and peace


 

What I did for you all these days
from toddler to teen
My birth child from day one to eternity
always know I am here, forever for you
through thick and thin
never go alone or be silenced
into the big world, tread lightly, learn much
Know I will always be here
waiting to talk, mom in her chair
My birth child, is who you are

mms 5.10.10


 

 

— magics02, May 10, 2010

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scribbler

16 years 1 month ago

birth child

I guess all parents see the child in our children even after they've grown up
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magics02

16 years ago

Yes we do

Thank you for the visit and any comments of the poem. What did you like or not like about it or do you see anything I need to correct scriber. Love, Mona TIME well spent is TIME well lived
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scribbler

16 years ago

birth child

I'm so unfamiliar with free form I'd never dream of making a suggestion on one whose form is this free.As I learn,you may wish you could shut me up!ha!ha!
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magics02

16 years ago

Your too funny scribble

I wish you would make a suggestion> I am open to all suggestions or comments, believe me it is in the learning that we progress. I would love for you to say whatever it is on the piece, and not to worry. that is what we are here for..You know I love your scribes too!! Visit soon thanks for the visit and the comments always. Love,Mona xoxox TIME well spent is TIME well lived
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scribbler

16 years ago

birth child

I liked the loving,heartfelt sentiments.I'll fall back on my architectural training.Frank Loyd Wright said sometimes less is more.Try deleting "that" in lines 1 ,11,and30. your friend ,Stan
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magics02

16 years ago

Stan

Thank you for reading the poem and offering that change of the word that, I just read it and it still flows and I so appreciate your input. I welcomed it!! Grazzi Mona xoxoxo
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magics02

16 years ago

Thank you Annie

I apreciate your comment and yes I can remember Joey when they brang him to me in a Christmas stocking on Christmas Eve some time ago. I still have his little hat and that stocking!! Boy has he grown up too fast. Thanks for your visit always. Love,Mona TIME well spent is TIME well lived
Alice Ember

Alice Ember

16 years ago

I love this Mona

It's a great way to immortanlize your love for your son. I love it Saeva Scaeva ( Latin) " Rampant she-devil"
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magics02

16 years ago

Thank you ALice

I got to check out your work here immortanlize, never heard that one before, I was just thinking the last couple of days how my son has grown so much and think of him as a toddler too..just a proud mom I quess you can say.. How are you doing and thank you for the visit honey Love mona TIME well spent is TIME well lived
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magics02

16 years ago

Yes correct

Thank you for the comment and yes our children are a blessing in more ways than one. No love stronger then the love for your child. Have a great day Shango!! Love,Mona TIME well spent is TIME well lived
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shirley harrison

16 years ago

What a beauty!

Ah Magic mom! Really beautiful has your son read it? and by the way is this poem one of those vannilla poems? looked like but im might be wrong!! Dear Mona did you look at the cook book let me know if you try something! Much love and well done beautiful write! shirley harrison
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magics02

16 years ago

Thank you honey

No it is not a villanelle sweetie I just was thinking about how fast my son is growing up.. amazing..I could not download the file only came as one page and thank you honey for stopping in and now I am off to work, See you later bella Love,Mona TIME well spent is TIME well lived
xena465

xena465

16 years ago

Very touching Mona

As Shirley said "Magic Mum". You made me wish that I'd a child so that I could feel these lovely feelings...ah well, I'll just pour them all on to my wee Zak instead...Super write Mona. Rosina xena465
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magics02

16 years ago

Thank you Rosalina dear

I am glad you appreciated this one also,and yes Zak you can pour all your love on him as he is your child too!! Will be by later and you have a super day today, dont let any words get in your way...lol Love Mona xxoxoxo TIME well spent is TIME well lived
mand

mand

16 years ago

Your a lovely lady Mona, and

Your a lovely lady Mona, and you have a wonderful relationship with your family, you are full of life and love, thanks for sharing this heartfelt poem. j Love Mand
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magics02

16 years ago

Thank you Mand

The that beautiful comment and yes as you know I am very close to my family. My boy is just growing up too fast in front of me...sometimes I wish he was still that toddler climbing all over the place.:) Thanks again for your stars and comments. Love, Mona xoxo TIME well spent is TIME well lived
judyanne

judyanne

16 years ago

lovely magic

a mother's love for her child surpasses all it is a shame they grow so fast that we tend to miss so much love judy xxx
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magics02

16 years ago

Thank you Judy

I love the cover of your book and I am proud of you. He knows and he would be so proud also of his Mom. I want to get a copy of this book real soon. Much love at you lady friend Mona xoxoxo TIME well spent is TIME well lived
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Dear Mona

From your poem, I can see that you are a loving care giver. Nicely done. Love, Cat
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magics02

16 years ago

Thank you Golden

I appreciate it very much and when is the day for the hospital? I thank you for the visit here and your comments. Love,Mona TIME well spent is TIME well lived
Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

16 years ago

Beautiful

Mona, this is simply a beautiful poem showing your love for your Son. I can't fault it, each word is wrapped in love. How old is your Son and has he read this poem? Lovely! Dan ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".
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magics02

16 years ago

Yes and thank you so much

Joey is now 17 acts like 30 LOL and I thank you for the read and the nice comments Hood. Who's up in that hood now?? LOL Love ya guy Mona xoxoxo TIME well spent is TIME well lived
ifoundaplace

ifoundaplace

16 years ago

ahh

awwh this is sweet. Mona, you are such a wondeful mother and I ope Joey realises how great you are to him. How much you love him so. I wish I could have a mother like you. But My mother is mine, and I love her too. wonderful poem Mona. Hunter
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magics02

16 years ago

Grazzi Dani

Thank you lovely friend of mine for the visit and the comments. I try to do the best I can as a single mom and I am rewarded for it ten fold. Thank you for stopping by again and your lovely comments here. Happy Birthday again!!! Love,Mona xoxox TIME well spent is TIME well lived
hobo

hobo

16 years ago

This is beautiful

This is beautiful my friend, this is how I feel about my kids. very nice
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magics02

16 years ago

Thank you Hobo

For the comment and visit to my page once again, Yes we share similiar feelings of love for out child(ren) I appreciate all the lovely comments on this poem I did for my boy. love,mona xoxox TIME well spent is TIME well lived