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judyanne
judyanne
May 10, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Life

 

Asleep when awake,

awake when asleep,

we reverberate in fragmented emotion.

 

Imagination evokes every possibility

only to fade,

but love splintered to allow manifestation

to freeze memory.

 

So let us endeavour to walk gently, tread softly,

so as to not

disturb the fabric

or wrap time up in knots.



And may we seek serenity in sorrow

and life in death.

 

For,

 

we may not always remember,

but we are always experiencing.

Forever somewhere.

 

 

— judyanne, May 10, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story

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Critiques

xena465

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Lovely Judy

Sometimes it feels like we're asleep when awake and vice versa as you say, but your words tells us to wake up and live the best we can. You never know when the aliens will take over…just kidding…from my recent poem. Rosina xena465
judyanne

judyanne

16 years ago

hi licia

thanks for commenting. my muses have actually left me - i don't know where the last couple of poems came from. usually i'm exploding with stuff (not always submittable) but my mind's dead at the moment. love judy xxxxx
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dearest Judd

Hmmmm you could say I been living this one the last couple of days not asleep and not awake lol bravo you just keep em coming and Ill always be around to read love and hugs JayCee x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
judyanne

judyanne

16 years ago

thanks jc

i'm glad you're still enjoying my writes. love and hugs judd xxx
SH

shirley harrison

16 years ago

Judy Wonderful words!

Since joining neo i feel like that too being over tired makes it hard to sleep! did you know, a great amount of parents do not! And just to say that my ironing never gets done either! Much love judy you are a beautiful poet! shirley harrison
judyanne

judyanne

16 years ago

thanks for visiting shirley

i don't iron if i inadvertently buy something that has to be ironed it only gets the first wear, then it's history. my mother used to iron my father's jocks and socks, as well as the sheets and pillowcases and tea-towels. crazy i think love judy xxx
SH

shirley harrison

16 years ago

well i will tell you quickly

before my boyfriend pops over my shoulder,, Some times in the past i have actually put my un ironed clothes some where where they get recicled but thats all im saying!!!! ssssshhhhhhhh its a secret! shirley harrison
judyanne

judyanne

16 years ago

Hey bud !!!!

my muses they have left me and this stuff i'm writing now is not what i expect to be - i want them back - but how? the colour green would do me good i wouldn't be a-kimbo the red i don't tolerate so well i turn into a bimbo love your duchess judd xxxx
loved

loved

16 years ago

sometimes i feel

... that you are trying to inject a soul in me i am sleeping while awake when will heavens me take i wonder if you know or ask someone who may............
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Dear Judy

My favorite lines are such a simple philosophy and so true: Seek serenity in sorrow and life in death. Love, Cat
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years ago

Elegant philosophy, beautifully written,

but do you yourself ever have a problem with poems written in the second person? Although I admit it is subtly done here, switching in the third stanza. I always get a bit of the feeling I'm in class, you know? So [let's] walk gently, tread[ing] softly. Try[ing] not to disturb the fabric Seek[ing] serenity in sorrow See how these small changes make it more of an invitation than an exhortation? Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible, "the alleged short-cut to knowledge, which is faith, is only a short-circuit destroying the mind." [Ayn Rand, Atlas Shrugged]
judyanne

judyanne

16 years ago

thanks jess

i did feel it was a bit 'teachy' but didn't know quite what to do with it. i've changed it - liked yours but felt it lost a bit of rhythm - so did it my way. does it still sound like an invitation? love judy xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years ago

indeed! glad to be of service

Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible, "the alleged short-cut to knowledge, which is faith, is only a short-circuit destroying the mind." [Ayn Rand, Atlas Shrugged]
M

magics02

16 years ago

You nver fail to Amaze me

Just splendid and it kind of went with my mind thoughts along the same line this morning about communication. This is grand lady, just grand. Wishing you much success on your book.. Love,Mona xxoxoxo TIME well spent is TIME well lived
judyanne

judyanne

16 years ago

magic mona !!!!

thank you my lovely lady thank you love judy-jane xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
R

raj

16 years ago

Judy..

what i find good is you have chosen the medium of poetry to express a thought which you found worth sharing...i found it thought provoking ..thank you... warmly..raj (sublime_ocean)..
judyanne

judyanne

16 years ago

thank you so mauch raj

i love that you found this thought-provoking. love to you judy xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
R

raj

16 years ago

yes indeed!!

yes indeed Judy...i loved the way you closed with these lines we may not always remember, but we are always experiencing. Forever somewhere much love n hugz... raj (sublime_ocean)..