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Smiles From The Grateful

The mute in his cell is dog bark coughing.
Junkies file into the toilets, shy and apologetic
or hungry with curses.
There’s the smell of cask wine and a war of bad radio.
Blood spotted cotton balls clog the drains. 
Tiny cigarette carcases disintegrate unfiltered.
Food scabs the concrete.
An ex-con complains that his city sleeping possie
has been disturbed by burglars.
“It ain’t right” he tells us.
An old hooker limps out like coffee dregs,
her once sold beauty gone like dust.
The delivery man is cancer thin,
lives on exhaust and trusting kindness.
The key code is 1937, so pogrom appropriate,
everything is locked down.
I sweep and clean like an old trustee.
Smiles from the grateful
and the piano music from the church hall
remind me it’s not prison.

 

— Ross Hamilton Hill, May 08, 2010

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Region, Country: Sydney, New South Wales, Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Dylan Thomas, T.S Eliot, Stevie Smith, Chaucer, Shakespeare, Marvell, Herbert, Gerald Manley Hopkins, Rilke, Holderlin, Baudelaire, Verlaine, Rimbaud, Valery, Gregory Corso, Alan Ginsberg, Phillip Larkin, Elizabeth Bishop, Wordsworth, Shelley, Keats, Yeats, Ferlinghetti, Tony Hoagland, Ezra Pound, Joni Mitchell, Bob Dylan, Leonard Cohen, Elizabeth Barrett Browning, Browning, Petra Whiteley, Blake, Thomas Hardy, Syvia Plath, Pablo Naruda, Lorca, Cole Porter, A.E Cummings, Walt whitman, Tennyson, Shelley, Byron, Coleridge, Les Murray, Gig Ryan, Edward Dorn, Emily Dickinson, Robert Frost, Seamus Heaney.

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magics02

16 years 1 month ago

wow Ross

Great write of yours and I bet you hear alot of stuff at that job. I liked this poem, alot of thought process in it and very well worded. magics02 aka Mona TIME well spent is TIME well lived
Ross Hamilton Hill

Ross Hamilton Hill

15 years 12 months ago

just had a good stare at your photo

now thats an image i could live with, forgive my flirting i'm a bit drunk, any way thanks for commenting, as you know, any recognition is heart warming, still you really do have a lovely face, will you marry me, no that's right i'm already married, in the next lifetime, ok?
M

magics02

15 years 12 months ago

Your too funny Ross

Thank you for the compliment there and if your sober now it may appear different Just kidding at ya. I see you have been away from the computer and thank you for at least acknowledging my comment to your poem. I appreciate that as sometimes we may make comments over and over to a poet and they never answer or acknowledge the words we leave. In other words they do not wish to interact and that is okay too. You have a lovely day now and talk to you again. Peace instilled Mona xxxxxxxxxxoxo
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 1 month ago

great write ross

if i close my eyes i can see it - great descriptive. and the sad thing is that what you write about is prevalent. love judy xxx
Ross Hamilton Hill

Ross Hamilton Hill

16 years ago

hi judy

thanks so much for your comments. best wishes ross
seabhac

seabhac

16 years ago

Ross I really like this

Its dark and stark it has a great story that grabs you in and makes you look at the dark ness thinking you know what you imagine it to be and then that lovely twist of the cleaning lady...we are all imprisioned in one way or another... One minor typo on A ( an?) ex-con complains that his city sleeping possie Awesome poem Seabhac
Ross Hamilton Hill

Ross Hamilton Hill

15 years 12 months ago

hi

i hope you read this, i'm catching up on replies after a time away from the pc, thanks for ypour interest and comment keep flying high love ross
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

16 years ago

Excellence

You captured the cage of routine life at the bottom of the pile, with its apathy and slow frustration, so very well. The imagery is evocative, painfully bright and real. I've spent lots of time in places like this. I would have used 1933 though, not 1937, but that's just a quibble, not important to the overall piece. "gigarette" should be "cigarette"? "carcases" should be "carcasses"? Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
Ross Hamilton Hill

Ross Hamilton Hill

16 years ago

Hi Jim

thanks for your comments, I fixed the cigarette typo, looked up carcases, is correct according to spell check. 1937 is the number code I use to unlock/lock parts of the center. Was the year the Nazi's started to round up Jews 'en masse'. There's a lot of positive vibes too in this 'drop in' centre although the amount of heroin use surprised me and I only clean it after the lunch time crowd goes. I value your insights regards ross
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pleiades

16 years ago

terrific descriptive

terrific descriptive verse, very evocative and easy to picture the scenario a couple of stand-out lines for me; Food scabs the concrete lives on exhaust and the trusting kindness (is 'the' strictly necessary?) a bleak, almost terse picture, that has the undertone of sadness and despair associated with such people/places great title for this piece cheers p
Ross Hamilton Hill

Ross Hamilton Hill

16 years ago

Hi there distant star

thanks for your observations, there were a few mistakes in this as i chnaged it a bit after i posted it, I've taken out the 'the' as you suggested, thanks for that.
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Ross

Sorry for the late comment but kudos for a wonderful write love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
themoonman

themoonman

16 years ago

Ross...

I enjoy your stark realism, life is a lock up for most of us in one way or another... but this, this is genuine poetry, the reason I'm here and continue to stay. thank you.
Ross Hamilton Hill

Ross Hamilton Hill

15 years 12 months ago

hi mate

well yes but we're free too. fuck the past and get ready for heaven. best wishes ross
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years ago

Flesh is enough of a prison

Flesh is enough of a prison when the mind imprisons the flesh. I find myself vacillating between a closed mind (sooner or later it does tend to shut itself in) and an open heart. Your poem addresses this reality we all live through, brilliantly I might add. Thank you for sharing. ~A "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta
Ross Hamilton Hill

Ross Hamilton Hill

15 years 12 months ago

a belated thanks

for your comments, have been busy lately with work but ever grateful peace and blessings ross
Seren

Seren

15 years 12 months ago

Dear Ross

Loved this one you've left me speechless Bow and a smile love and hugs JayCee x x x sorry just came back for another read ... it really is a good poem ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Ross Hamilton Hill

Ross Hamilton Hill

15 years 12 months ago

speechless?

I find that hard to believe, been busy stage managing the sydney eisteddfod, largest eisteddfod in the world, isnt it wonderful being an aussie, sport and art love ya ross
Seren

Seren

15 years 12 months ago

Ross many many years ago i

Ross many many years ago i performed in the Sydney City Esteddford I sung many sections ... even competed for the dame Joan sutherland Scholarship I have sung in the main hall and in the antirooms underneath the opera house as well lol love and big hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Seren

Seren

15 years 12 months ago

P.S you may remember my singing teacher

He was based in Sydney and here in Taree, Kevin Mills ? used to sing with the London Opera Company was born in Wingham not far from where I live Love JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Ross Hamilton Hill

Ross Hamilton Hill

15 years 11 months ago

Hi

that's interesting, I hope you still sing, I shall look up Kevin Mills, there's a book just been published giving a history of the syd eisteddfod, if i see anything i'll email thanks also for your comments about bus stop, I havnt been reading any poetry lately , too busy, also had the flu which is a nasty one, wish i'd had the vaccine. ross
brittle light

brittle light

15 years 11 months ago

this piece has just upped the game

it may be simply a matter of taste, but this is how I like poetry done. The clarity and immediacy of concisely worded images is startling. the overall effect, an idelible painting by an artful master. with great admiration and appriciation, AL
Ross Hamilton Hill

Ross Hamilton Hill

15 years 11 months ago

thanks al

I'm not commenting on friends poetry at the moment, busy with work, but shall check you out later, this poem got a lot of response, i regret not focusing more on the positives, like the priest of the church who runs the drop in centre, a living saint, and the kindness of many volunteers and also many of the down and outs who are no less good.