winter's song,the edit

It takes time to get used to using the site...well done. Rosina xena465

Wistful characterisation

but these old bone don't like it now. I loved the ice and snow. We would ski behind my 56 chevy truck. On my spare tire. Holding onto a 100 foot extension cord. Life is what you make it. So enjoy it no matter the weather. Good read. See you tomorrow. Take Care. huey

Very well done! I like the title. The language use is very descriptive. I love poems about Winter. The ending was conclusive. My favorite lines: Although life seems to now have fled from hoary woods that seem so dead the slower pulse of lives still beat though stealthy now instead of fleet Always, Cat

You're making me wish for winter very dearly, Scribbler. Teasing me with this in the middle of a heat wave... My main suggestion, since winter is personnified ("I hear the winter’s call and he arrives to slay the leaves") is for caps on the seasons. That line would then need an adjective to replace "the", winter is certainly white and cold, it can also be old, or something else. For this part, "the slower pulse of lives still beat though stealthy now instead of fleet", "beat" could use an "s" as it is the pulse that beats. Since that would weaken the rhyme, maybe "more slowly pulses of lives beat", since I removed the "still", I changed "the slower" to "more slowly", which implies a "still". And here: "Although this seasons cold and still", I suggest "season's" Also, I just looooove winter. Hard to choose a favourite part to your poem, the descriptions are all so beautiful. Probably this stanza: "As white and silver cloak descends to cover silent land the air,once cool,turns frigid, clear and quietens all at hand" For the peaceful silence. Well it doesn't say peaceful but to me it does. Ahh, if I could, I'd live where there's snow 10 or 11 months a year... Antoine