Hooded Stranger

May 07, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

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Dust choked mirror reflects dark sunken
orbs beneath crescent moon halves
Mutated skin wrists hang from frail
fractured limbs of tormented sinew

I've been here before and I know the routine
I've seen this before and I know what it means

Luna disc penetrates silver shards
across splintered boards of decline
Concentric circles of aching frown sends
ripped muscles into relentless spasm

I've been here before and I know the routine
Three hundred and sixty degrees
Right back down on my hands and knees
Three hundred and sixty degrees
.
I've seen this before and I know what it means
Three hundred and sixty degrees
Right back down on bloodied knees
Three hundred and sixty degrees

Skeletal digits stab jagged points into
broken face lingering in hopeless gawp
Déjà vu taunts and amplifies grief
filled pearls of salt stinging open wounds

I've seen this before and I know what it means
I've been here before and I know the routine

Stiffened facial expression of faith lost man
known as beast where little else compares
Dwelling within on the fringe of the brittle and
crumbling wall of inner haunting and remorse

Arc of hatred paints impure line across
hoarse and exposed chords of sound
Gurgled grin of remembrance falls silent
as tobacco stained breath expels existence

© 2010 Unsqueezed Productions

— Hooded Stranger, May 07, 2010

About the Author

Region, Country: West England, GBR

Favorite Poets: Sylvia Plath (poet), Caitlin Mattison/Eddy Styx (poet 'candlewitch'), Enda Collins (poet 'ziggy'), Martin Gore (lyricist for Depeche Mode), Neil Tennant (lyricist for Pet Shop Boys), Stefan Großmann (lyricist for Absurd Minds), Lemmy Kilmister (lyricist for Motörhead), Nathan Reiner (lyricist for Third Realm), Wayne Hussey (lyricist for The Mission), Leonard Cohen (lyricist), Tom Shear (lyricist for Assemblage 23), Clint Carney (lyricist for System Syn & Fake), Ronan Harris (lyricist for VNV Nation), Aaron Lewis (lyricist for Staind), Jason Charles Miller (lyricist for Godhead), Torben Wendt (lyricist for Diorama), Adrian Hates (lyricist for Diary Of Dreams)

Critiques

Candlewitch

16 years 2 months ago

Dear HS

This song is so good, I can't wait to hear it. The message really digs in grabs the reader. I can relate... my favorite lines are: Luna disc penetrates silver shards across splintered boards of decline Concentric circles of aching frown sends ripped muscles into relentless spasm I’ve been here before and I know the routine Three hundred and sixty degrees Right back down on my hands and knees Three hundred and sixty degrees You are fast becoming my favorite dark writer! Always, Cat

Hooded Stranger

16 years 2 months ago

Cat

Cat, firstly you must have nominated it, because suddenly and with no real system, it is now 19%! LOL! I have already a demo in place with this, how it will end I am not sure and I may have to drop a verse otherwise it will be an album in itself! This, as you know was just a poem and I tried many attempts at adding a chorus and each one did not do the verses any justice, in fact they felt as if they were making the verses, how can I put this...um..cheap! I am now happy to have added the chorus and hopefully people will like it. Thanks for your kind words. regards, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

ziggy

16 years 2 months ago

hood

HOOD I love the finished version of this and as cat said " it grabs the reader " this as a song i would want to hear every word of it used as is, if i had to pick fav lines after reading it again it would have to be the ending last verse as in this the ending is key , all in all hood the spot light might chase you so RUNNNNNNNNNNN LOL ###############ZIGGY

Hooded Stranger

16 years 2 months ago

Zigs, your reply is three door down!!

------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

Lonnie

16 years 2 months ago

I await the sounds!

Fantastic words filled with superb imagery and intensity! You have captured something magical here and I can only imagine how it will resonate when heard by the ear! Great Poem!

Hooded Stranger

16 years 2 months ago

Lonnie

Lonnie, many thanks for your kind words. This was never going to be a song but it just developed. I hope to get this one on the next album, although, it may have to wait as this album is almost done. I'll maybe record it as spoken poem with a gentle tempo or something - I'll keep you posted, thanks again, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

Hooded Stranger

16 years 2 months ago

Zigs

Glad you liked the finished version. Your extra verse and subtle changes have helped make this more of an epic than it was to start with. I am quite excited about recording this one. You'll get a promo copy, so don't worry. Posting your CD tomorrow as well, so you should have it next week sometime. Thanks for commenting. I am away all weekend so chat to you on Monday. I will have to finish off editing the 'untitled,' but possibly 'Dweller' on Sunday evening, cheers, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

shirley harrison

16 years 2 months ago

really powerful

Hey guys, Wow i love all of your stuff its so energetic! shirley harrison

Hooded Stranger

16 years 2 months ago

Shirley

Shirley, thanks my friend - we do try our best. Have a great weekend, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

Alice Ember

16 years 2 months ago

Great job

I love the way you improved it since you showed me. I love it Saeva Scaeva ( Latin) " Rampant she-devil"

Hooded Stranger

16 years 2 months ago

Alice

Alice, it certainly took shape from the original didn't it. Really pleased you like the revamped version...all I have to do is record it!! Thanks for dropping by and leaving a comment, regards, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

Kailashana

16 years 2 months ago

Hi Dan, though I wasn’t

Hi Dan, though I wasn't privy or available to see the behind the scenes evolution of this poem, must say it evoked some powerful images and feelings. It reminded me of an image of a shackled man in a poet group I belong to, Poets for Human Rights. With a few tweaks it would be an appropriate song, imo. Just a thought, Dan. http://groups.yahoo.com/group/PoetsforHumanRights/?yguid=272229918 (it is now a ring, no longer a yahoogroup.) ~Anna "The plain man is familiar with blindness and deafness, and knows from his everyday experience that the look of things is influenced by his senses, but it never occurs to him to regard the whole world as a creation of his senses." ~ Ernst Mach

Hooded Stranger

16 years 2 months ago

Anna

Anna, I took a look at the image - thanks for sharing. This piece is more about me and my inner disturbance over many years. I guess it could be altered to convey a song with a more direct approach at Human Rights, but it wasn't written with that in mind. The shackles are quite explicit, whereas my idea of shackles within this piece would be hidden shackles inside my heart and mind. Sorry you weren't included in the 'behind the scenes', but I no longer have your contact details and as you know, you have blocked my messages - but hey, you still got to read it. HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

Kailashana

16 years 2 months ago

I keep forgetting to unblock

I keep forgetting to unblock you. That was pretty crazy, eh? Glad we're on the same page now without an ill-will. I know, according to how you have written & I have read your poem/lyrics your intent, hence my suggestion for a few tweaks to compose music for the group. Larry is deeply involved with the United Nations and its human rights as a poet It might be huge for you. Just a thought. ~A "If you think you're free, there's no escape possible." ~ Ram Dass

Hooded Stranger

16 years 2 months ago

I wasn't...

...complaining about you blocking me, just letting you know why I couldn't involve you at an earlier stage of the development of this piece. You can leave me blocked, it's no problem. I don't think our depressing electro/darkwave music style is appropriate for Larry - but thanks anyway, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

Kailashana

16 years 2 months ago

Geeze, HS… we’re going

Geeze, HS... we're going to end up getting into the same trap again... I didn't interpret it as a *complaint*, I was merely indicating my forgetfulness about my desire to unblock you as it seemed we're on a new page. Perhaps you're right about your music's *appropriateness*... but imo, you never know anything for sure unless you try, unless of course you don't want to. I just made a suggestion, no big thing, Dan. In any case, I'm glad you're back, glad you're making music and look forward to that CD. K? ~A "If you think you're free, there's no escape possible." ~ Ram Dass

magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Hood

Would love to hear this one and this part I liked the best I’ve been here before and I know the routine Three hundred and sixty degrees Right back down on my hands and knees Three hundred and sixty degrees that is some hot stuff there and wording is grand!! You can write and I know you can sing too..very good here Love, Mona . TIME well spent is TIME well lived

Hooded Stranger

16 years 2 months ago

Mona

Mona, it seems a lot would like to hear this one - I'll keep you posted as it does have potential for a song. The part you like is the chorus, which is key to the whole piece. The verses are ok, but the link is the chorus that throws the 360 degrees in, which obviously is the repeating episode in the individuals life who has been through this before and has gone full circle and is back where he started. You can be my new groupie!! Hope you are well and I will be responding to the PM later tonight or tomorrow (I have just got back from being away this weekend). Kind regards, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Glad your back and

Hoping the headache is gone now. Yes I will await to hear this song from you. And yes of course I love the course!! Happy Day HS Mona TIME well spent is TIME well lived

club special

16 years 2 months ago

Spastic imagery reined in by

Spastic imagery reined in by dark italic letters, only kidding about the italics. Your imagination gets you five stars. this poem is very raw but very real. Don't see much stuff on here that heartfelt...-Club Special

Hooded Stranger

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Club Special

Dear Club Special, Glad you found the 'spastic' imagery, entwined in dark italics. (I tend to use bold type to represent the 'bridge' and bold italics for the chorus). Raw but real - I can go with that. It is an introspective piece, so it was written with 'heartfelt' emotions. Thanks for dropping by and commenting, kindest regards, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

greeneyes

16 years 2 months ago

Dan

This is why you are one of my favorites! Amazing. Elizabeth

Hooded Stranger

16 years 2 months ago

Elizabeth

Elizabeth, Hey!, what do you mean ONE of your favourites, I had hoped to be your ONLY favourite and now it seems I have competition!! LOL! Glad you liked this one - I have enjoyed watching this one develop from a simple poem into a full epic song - just hope I can deliver the piece as a great song. Thanks for your words, Regards, Dan ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

lyz

16 years 2 months ago

The Prince is back

and your gonna be in trouble, hey la le la, the Prince is back. Wow. Blow me away with this deafening song. Love it and I am glad to see you being particular with perfection. I have noticed a change in you and if you go back on your old work, you will see, and I think you have hit a new level mate. A+ and a bravo to you. Love Lyz. XX

Hooded Stranger

16 years 2 months ago

Trouble?

I am always in trouble of some sorts!! I will review my previous work and see if I can see what you can see. A new level...one level up or two levels down? LOL! cheers matey, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

lyz

16 years 2 months ago

I miss your wit hun, lol.

2 levels up for sure. There is a difference, I cant put my finger on it, you seem more confident, or something, I dont know, I love all your work, you know that. And, I am so pleased you returned and I will catch up later and see what you have posted, and hi to Oliver and Julie, and Bye. XX And and and, Lol

ziggy

16 years 2 months ago

hi

well done on spot light, did i not tell you to run from the light hood lol ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs

Hooded Stranger

16 years 2 months ago

Zigs

Zigs, this one has already been in the spotlight and now it takes another turn! I must go an nominate all those poems in the running that are below me! I'm running! HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

Roscoe Lane

16 years 2 months ago

Very imaginative writing,

loved the way it is put together. Regards Roscoe...

Hooded Stranger

16 years 2 months ago

Roscoe

Roscoe, many thanks for your kind words, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

frangipangi

16 years 1 month ago

good, just great

Oooohhhhh you are sooo,so talented. THANK YOU Hooded. Fran

Hooded Stranger

16 years 1 month ago

I am?

Fran, thank you kindly for your comment. I am glad you enjoyed the write, kindest regards, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

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