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Lepadah
Lepadah
May 07, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

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our legs entwine into a twister your hands run through my hair morning play before we end this day so I got... got how do you know is it the happy rejoice in my voice "HELLO!" "HELLO!" or by way I press tight into your chest listening to your heart sing or is it my plea of baby come close confidence in your reply come get me © 2010 Lepadah All rights reserved Reproduction of any materials without permission is strictly prohibited. Copyright 1999-2010.
— Lepadah, May 07, 2010

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Country/Region: New York

Favorite Poets: Rumi, Gil Scott Heron, Felipe Luciano, Walt Whitman, Ginsberg, Kerouac, Neruda, Walker, Troupe, James Baldwin etc . . .list endless

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yenti

yenti

16 years ago

Lepadah

This is a good piece but has a shortness that loses the reader someplace between lover and child needs a few more words from its maker to be better, Yours Ian.T
Lepadah

Lepadah

16 years ago

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Thanks Ian I realize the shortness of this one. It was the moment a quick one and response to a personal friend. I totally agree with your critique. Peace Lepadah
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Arrow

16 years ago

I have to agree with Ian

This lacks your usual *zing*. You lost me with the singing heart, which somehow seemed a little too sentimental. Maybe you'll rework this. I do love getting got and could use a flashback.
Lepadah

Lepadah

16 years ago

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Hi, As per my comment I agree as well. A private look see to a personal friend. Peace Lepadah