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May 06, 2010
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Caterpillar wish
.
It was unexpected
It came after the loving,
after impassioned declarations
and the touch
that reached
deeper than blue
It arrived uninvited
We lay there
spent,
serpentine
across rumpled sheets
,
with the delicate balance
of promise
swaying before us
shining
like the polish of silver
on starched white linen
.
It was unexpected
It came after the loving,
after impassioned declarations
and the touch
that reached
deeper than blue
It arrived uninvited
We lay there
spent,
serpentine
across rumpled sheets
,
with the delicate balance
of promise
swaying before us
shining
like the polish of silver
on starched white linen
.
— pleiades, May 06, 2010
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magics02
16 years 2 months ago
You go girl
pleiades
16 years 2 months ago
thanks mona for such
Seren
16 years 2 months ago
Dearest P
pleiades
16 years 2 months ago
thanks jc, your words are
Kailashana
16 years 2 months ago
This is poetry, “shining
pleiades
16 years 2 months ago
me like that line too!thank
themoonman
16 years 2 months ago
Pleiades...
pleiades
16 years 2 months ago
so glad the title drew you
weirdelf
16 years 2 months ago
all the above but...
Kailashana
16 years 2 months ago
I’m betting it is no
pleiades
16 years 2 months ago
you win the bet
pleiades
16 years 2 months ago
weirdelf...
pleiades
16 years 2 months ago
.
Candlewitch
16 years 2 months ago
Hello
pleiades
16 years 2 months ago
thank you cat, for such
Esker
16 years 2 months ago
seen
pleiades
16 years 2 months ago
thank you e, for
Esker
16 years 2 months ago
Wear silk ties
pleiades
16 years 2 months ago
well now you’re just
Restlesslittlesoul
16 years 1 month ago
Amazing!
pleiades
16 years 1 month ago
thank you restless, for such
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