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FAR AWAY


Oh Laura you are in love, but what can you do
for he has gone so far away, so far away from you.
As you switch on the TV, to see the News at Ten
you start to wonder if you will ever see him again.

As he was driving his army jeep, along the dusty road
there was an explosion ahead, a land mine he was told.
The jeep was hit by the blast as bleeding he hit the ground
but soon he was relieved to see army medics gather around.

And he knew if he'd been a little further ahead
he and the soldiers with him surely would have been dead.
You pick up the phone nervously and listen to what they say
he is injured, but it's just his foot and he's coming home to stay.

Unlike his great uncle long ago, wounded in the First World War
lying in a trench, with mud and rats, seeing things never seen before.
Men around him white with fear, trying to survive the dark of the night
he was weak and cold and his young life ended, just before first light.
— Timbo, May 06, 2010

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Country/Region: GBR

Favorite Poets: Rather than poets I tend to be influenced by songwriters and have a love of lyrics.

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judyanne

judyanne

16 years 1 month ago

great write timbo

and around the right time for us aussies celebrating our anzacs service for us. is this a true write? if so, i'm so glad that he's okay love judy
Tim

Tim

16 years 1 month ago

Thanks Judy, nice to hear

Thanks Judy, nice to hear from you again. No it's not a true write, but it was written with thoughts about our British Guys and others of course serving in Afghanistan at the moment. you take care, Tim.
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shirley harrison

16 years 1 month ago

wow tim

congratulations a great poem and all so real,i am from london, so this poem has spoken in so many ways! Thank you! i have girlfriends whos husbands are in the army, and i often wonder these things! shirley harrison
Tim

Tim

16 years 1 month ago

thank you Shirley, for your

thank you Shirley, for your thoughtful and encouraging response. war is a terrible thing but I suppose it is also a necessary evil, when we have to defend ourselves against those who want to harm us. best regards, Tim
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Tim

Speechless my friend i have a friend overseas hes in the Aslavs in Iraq ... makes me shudder the risks they take everyday while we walk around free and safe ... and soon my sons gone as well love and hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Tim

Tim

16 years 1 month ago

Hi JayCee, Nice to hear from

Hi JayCee, Nice to hear from you again. Thanks for your comments and reaction to my poem and I do hope your friend and your son keep safe. you take care, Best wishes, Tim
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 1 month ago

Hello

A wonderfully constructed poem on a terrible subject. Very nicely rhymed. It had a highly sobering effect on me. five stars and a nomination. Always, Cat
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hippiepoet69

16 years 1 month ago

Hats off

I had an uncle who faught in the trenches. He never talked about it to anyone. One of my nieces did two tours in Iraq. And her huband has done three. Although she was not in combat. She went on convoys a lot. Her husband is a medic. God bless all our troops. Take Care. huey
Tim

Tim

16 years 1 month ago

thank you Huey, you’ve

thank you Huey, you've done me proud today with all your encouraging comments, all the best Tim
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magics02

16 years 1 month ago

WOW another one

Must get those tissue boxes out that Darknlovely is talking about tonight. True story here? Beautifully written Timbo TIME well spent is TIME well lived
Tim

Tim

16 years 1 month ago

thanks again Mona, not a

thanks again Mona, not a true story this time, just my reaction I suppose to things that are happening with our boys serving in Afghanistan. take care, Tim
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magics02

16 years 1 month ago

I hear you on that one loud and clear

Yes I wonder when will it ever end? Or will it ever, we can only hope and pray someday our men and woman can all be home with their families soon Mona TIME well spent is TIME well lived