Goodnight

Told you I would be by and fast at that one. The only thing that did not jive with me was the ending instead of I'll die how about just the word die (and die) I noticed that you did not ask for crit, in hopes you will take it as a tidbit from me, it is however your write. And I will have to check out your others. The will of my master (good line) Love, Mona TIME well spent is TIME well lived I am back LOL and I see you did a correction great and then now just check the word submit.. Hope you don't mind Great poem!!! Loved it very much. xoxox

Ann of Norway It is a different kind of poem from your usual pen, no fairy tale, but actual and present in our human minds (as opposed to the pixies etc.) and what an image of THE END and a wonderful title too, superbly and so simply seen, it is the simple that gives it its succinct power and presence, it grips our minds and spells the words out with such precision and rings home in our minds. This is very good to my mind. Well done I blaze all the trumpets I can for this your poem, dear sweet greeneyes, with much love from Ann I still add that the last two lines very slightly bothered me, but maybe not as I re read it!

What a powerful,(and beautiful write). For someone like me,(who doesn't understand the nuances of the language),it offers many possibilities.

I really loved this one but thought if you did this The darkness surrounds me, As he kisses my tears, and ended my suffering, as he devoured my fears. had is nearly not needed in both cases ... I think its got a better flow with those two hads gone ... but its a seductive write lured into the hold of darkness I loved it will be back in the edits love and big hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Your words flowed right through my veins...Brilliant. Rosina xena465

This poem was suppose to be written by you, its put together perfectly. Im never surprised by your individual skill that I enjoye reading. PHENOM:T.S