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Seismic tic



Surrepticious analysis

crawls like black and white
venom
like a second fabric
lean and stretched
around your noun

just the pretext
makes me shiver
like the whirlwind
and hoovebeats

You uncover
what once was
forgotten
just with the
periphery nod

— Esker, May 05, 2010

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Region, Country: north ontario, CAN

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Esker

Esker

16 years 1 month ago

Bertoldt Brecht

and others creative geniuse (I am not one) folk lore heros and here even in the city thriving My right hand brain activity burning like a brand like an ember painful as hot August repetoire and my new faith teaching me the old moral code the new scrutiny making me think of behavioural therapy (which I could use) to improve myself one thing leads in and another cancels out what to follow?? what to approve?? I go back to what was there encouraging me fifteen years ago like it was yesterday all sides helping and above these sides was God Higher Power Creator etc no one asked me to join I am here sorting sifting thinking remembering forty five years of Now good old Will Burroughs Kerouc and others they have had their say what of the new up and coming artists poets I say youth can give us wisdom as much as the elder wisdom we must fuse the two as was always appreciated we must not lose sight of the cadet of life or the sergeant whom had the experience appreciate all consider all is all I ask ' Esker!
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Steven

What a brilliant poem ... I loved it the moment hung suspended at the end ... really great end lines my friend love and hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
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pleiades

16 years 1 month ago

serepticious…did you mean

serepticious...did you mean surreptitious? your comment gives this write added potency fantastic lines throughout this... hard for me to single out any for extra praise the parts make the sum "like a second fabric lean and stretched around your noun" (well looky here, i CAN single something out) this phrase gives me serious envy issues, and these issues aren't helped at all by the last stanza! (i wish i had written it) this is a very strong write e, and your careful use of words and phrases serve it well this is one of those writes that for me, carries as much impact in the unsaid, as well as the said. i think this is in my top 10 from you p.
Esker

Esker

16 years 1 month ago

delicate is the brunt of the fulcrum

I will single our your line "in the unsaid, as well as the said." you my dear have vision exactly the delicate need of language and conveyance in written or verbalized dialoge or monologue thank you for the great insight your freind Esker~