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Professor Purple
Professor Purple
May 04, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

LIKE YOU JUST DON'T KNOW I EXIST

There once was a time, a wonderful timeWhen I thought we were close you and IThat time is now gone, so painfully goneAnd now you won’t even say hi Denial is mean, denial is dumbIf you try you’ll see what I meanDenial is dumb, denial is meanBut to denial we all succumb You said that you care, but you just don’t show itAnd it’s up to me to be patientI hope and I wish, but I just don’t know itThat someday you’ll stop being silent Denial is mean, denial is dumbIf you try you’ll see what I meanDenial is dumb, denial is meanBut to denial we all succumb I do understand feelings don’t always lastBut I think we should respect the pastAnd his hurts me more than could any fistIt’s like you don’t know I existLike you just don’t know I exist
— Professor Purple, May 04, 2010

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Beauregard

Beauregard

16 years 1 month ago

Reminds me of a cross between

Edgar Allan Poe and Winnie the Pooh (this is a good thing, as those are my favorite things). Don't ask me how I came up with that, that's just what came to mind as I read this! You know what, I think it's the rhyme and repetition. The rhyme reminds me of Poe and the repetition reminds me of Winnie the Pooh ("the wonderful thing about Tiggers, is Tiggers are wonderful things"). If I may offer some critique: I'm not sure if 'dumb' and 'mean' in your refrains really fit the tone of the poem. I feel like you used those word for the sake of the rhyme, but I'm sure there's got to be some more eloquent synonyms such as "stupid" and "putrid" or "doltish" and "clownish", etc. Also, on the last stanza, "And his hurts me more than could any fist", do you mean his past hurts you? This was a little unclear to me. They're not worth our suffering dear, just remember the good memories and don't worry about the rest, you'll be much better off that way. "Never allow someone to be your priority while allowing yourself to be their option" Looking forward to more of your poems :) Kelsey
xena465

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Prof P

Good first write. I enjoyed it very much. Rosina xena465
Professor Purple

Professor Purple

16 years 1 month ago

Thank you all for your

Thank you all for your comments and encouragement! Now, the "denial is dumb-mean" part is an inside, the rhyme was built around them, not the other way around. For your other question, Kelsie, it's the total silence that hurts me, which I think has much to do with denial, but no I don't regret a single thing, and I do focus on the good memories, and more importantly, the future. And uh, I'll remember that “Never allow someone to be your priority while allowing yourself to be their option”. You do see quite clearly into my poem. That quote is very wise, but not always easy to apply, right? Who is it from? I don't think I'll change this poem, but I will try to apply your advice to my future work. This one was done very quickly, right after I joined Neopoet, because most of my other work is more song-like. Not that there's a lot of finished ones. Prof. P.
Beauregard

Beauregard

16 years 1 month ago

I've read

that that quote is from Mark Twain, but I've also read that it's from lots of other people, so I guess no one knows who said it! Everything is always easier said than done, I think, just keep on pushing, you'll make it through :) Kelsey
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magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Hello Professor

I know you exist and I see you have a wonderful mind and heart, looking forward to more of your writes. I liked this one of yours Magics02 aka Mona TIME well spent is TIME well lived