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May 04, 2010
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homeplace
I came upon a house today
though most of it had gone away
and left behind its mossy bones
of listing piers and cracked hearthstones
So I took a pause for pondering
in midst of random woodland wandering
to think of those who once lived there
where none go now but deer and hare
My gaze took in a lonesome hollow
and found that it was drawn to follow
up the course of a small spring
that issued forth from a stone ring
I saw then that their source of drink
came from that spring
not some wells brink
they hauled water to wash and drink
there stood an oak still giving shade
to this home's space as when a glade
surrounded it instead of woods
and quail would raise thier tiny broods
did once childrens laughter ring
as they swayed on a long rope swing
that hung from this tree's lower limb ?
I wondered what became of them
perhaps their father trudged at night
from working fields toward cheery light
where loving wife prepared a meal
to help assauge his hungry feel
but evening came, I had to go
or my own love would worry so
I set my feet to homeward take me
for now my joints and muscles ached me
I had,then,no more time to wonder
about deserted homeplace yonder
though most of it had gone away
and left behind its mossy bones
of listing piers and cracked hearthstones
So I took a pause for pondering
in midst of random woodland wandering
to think of those who once lived there
where none go now but deer and hare
My gaze took in a lonesome hollow
and found that it was drawn to follow
up the course of a small spring
that issued forth from a stone ring
I saw then that their source of drink
came from that spring
not some wells brink
they hauled water to wash and drink
there stood an oak still giving shade
to this home's space as when a glade
surrounded it instead of woods
and quail would raise thier tiny broods
did once childrens laughter ring
as they swayed on a long rope swing
that hung from this tree's lower limb ?
I wondered what became of them
perhaps their father trudged at night
from working fields toward cheery light
where loving wife prepared a meal
to help assauge his hungry feel
but evening came, I had to go
or my own love would worry so
I set my feet to homeward take me
for now my joints and muscles ached me
I had,then,no more time to wonder
about deserted homeplace yonder
— scribbler, May 04, 2010
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xena465
16 years 1 month ago
Hi scribbler
scribbler
16 years 1 month ago
homeplace
xena465
16 years 1 month ago
Hi Scribbler
scribbler
16 years 1 month ago
homeplace
magics02
16 years 1 month ago
Hello
scribbler
16 years 1 month ago
homeplace
xena465
16 years 1 month ago
Hi scribbler
Kailashana
16 years 1 month ago
Oh, my god, fix it? It’s
scribbler
16 years 1 month ago
homeplace
scribbler
16 years 1 month ago
homeplace
xena465
16 years 1 month ago
Well done
magics02
16 years 1 month ago
Yes I think it looks and reads much better
hippiepoet69
16 years ago
Great poem
scribbler
16 years ago
homeplace
scribbler
16 years ago
homeplace
shirley harrison
15 years 11 months ago
Oh stan
scribbler
15 years 11 months ago
homeplace