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Laced Destiny in Pearl

she opened my eyes
to a wonderful world,
gave me life lessons
in memories of pearl

in giving me wings
so I could fly too
she gave me her spirit
and I never knew

she said I could climb
that hill over there,
she told me to hurry
with time it would wear

the roads of the plant
wove into her face
now I walk them to find
a steady calm pace

with the days of life
not waiting for me,
I cant waste a second
before flying free

so I took out my wings
and I'm dusting them off
cause time passed me by
and somehow I forgot

the best of my life
is somewhere ahead
with this rhyme I promise
your spirit is fed

I wont be remembered
in the history of words,
but my spirit will fly
on the wing of jaybirds

and as your presence
starts coming back,
I live in a memory
hung with lace and lilac
 

— Seren, May 04, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Critiques

C

CyberSpace

16 years 1 month ago

orsm poem but I am hiding

orsm poem but I am hiding your wings lol ;) love hubby xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxox
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Good luck finding them pmsl

Good luck finding them pmsl ~! ;) thanks for the comment glad you liked it :P love Wifey x x x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 1 month ago

very beautiful jc

'with this rhyme I promise your spirit is fed' like lighting a candle. love and hugs judd xxxx
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Judd

I wrote a few of these the other night so glad you liked it just polishing up my rhyming skills ;) making sure I still got it lol thanks for the lovely compliment hun its good to have your smiling face back you have been missed love and hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
xena465

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Poetic Genus

Your words just flowed through my veins...Superb JayCee. Rosina xena465
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Rosina

what a wonderful comment thank you I do love my rhymers but I have been working on my blank verse, now its time for another change I am going to work on a few different forms of poetry and I am about to switch it up again love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
R

raj

16 years 1 month ago

Three S's

Dear JayCee... Soft Serene Soliloqy is how i choose to describe your poem... wonderfull usage of words which lend a soft tone and express the mood so well..like in the closing verse.. and as your presence starts coming back, I live in a memory hung with lace and lilac .. a pleasure to read a couple of times... warmly...raj (sublime_ocean)
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Raj

So glad you liked my rhyme it was just the first of a few I have written and I hope you like the others as much as you liked this one big smiles of thanks love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Jayne

I can find no fault with your poem. In fact I have enjoyed it immensely. Loved the ease of your rhymes. Each time I think you have topped yourself, you go and do it again! No favorite lines as they all call out to me. Love, Cat
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dearest Cat

This one just popped out the other night I did a little work to it but thought I would leave it and see what you all thought lol ((((hugs)))) I am always happy when you like them love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
SH

shirley harrison

16 years 1 month ago

Kicking arse!

This is Fucking brilliant welcome to my world Jc! I am sorry to use bad language but my god now i hear you! Much love shirley harrison
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Shirley

You havent been here long enough so you wouldn't know , I started out rhyming and moved to blank verse last november ... if you look at poems written before that month 90 percent of them are rhymers ... I am a singing teacher so I hsve about 300 songs and over a thousand rhyming poems, this is just a visit back to a world I left months ago and every now and then i write a rhymer to keep my skill level up you say fuck on my page anytime you like I often say it lmao ;) I have a few other rhymers I am going to post over the next week or so hope you enjoy them love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
SH

shirley harrison

16 years 1 month ago

Forgot to say

We are what we want to be not what others expect! shirley harrison
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Shirley

we should all aim to be that but as are also what the hands of life have moulded us into as well ... this ones a nod to a friend who showed me that I was something when i thought I had and was nothing love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
M

magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Just loved it Jayne

The flow here and the wording hand in hand was another masterpiece of yours Jayne...the pearls..beauty defined. Bravo friend Love,Mona TIME well spent is TIME well lived
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Mona

Many thanks for the Bravo its much appreciated and I am so very happy you liked this one have a few rhymers over the next couple of weeks so looking forward to seeing what everyone thinks of them they are all brand new ... love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
L

lyz

16 years 1 month ago

Dearest Aunty JayCee

You tell uncle, we will find you a spare pair, lol. Mate, grand is as read. You have in this fast paced write, a happy light feel and I love the words woven to the very end. Wonderful hun. Love all. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dearest Nana

PMSL ... Ask Jade what hes like when I talk about spending time away lol might have to put an order in for a pair if he hides mine ner ner ner waves hahahaha love to you hun glad you liked this one was trying to lighten up somewhat I been writing dark moody stuff of late its time to shake it off lol love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
B

barbsdad2003

16 years 1 month ago

A fun ...

piece to read. Thanx. If I may, as to and as your presence starts coming back, I live in a memory hung with lace and lilac, back and lilac do rhyme. However, back is accented in the write, whereas the lac in lilac falls unaccented on the ear, which scrubs a modicum of shine off that particular rhyme. A tidbit of a critique (albeit a small one) in an otherwise quite wonderfully written piece. As usual, altho it goes, I think, without saying, my comment's proffered with much respect/regard undergirding/supporting such. Thanx, Chuck
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Chuck

I think it maybe our accents for me it sounds ok ... but I agree with you I will have a think and see what else I cant come up with there are so many different ways I could take that end line ... watch this space lol will see what I think of lol love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
greeneyes

greeneyes

16 years 1 month ago

This is why............

This is why you are my hero, I think this one is my new favorite, but I always say that. Perfect Jayne! Love, Elizabeth
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Elizabeth

I know the feeling hun ... I get that way with other writers and thank you for your lovely comment its much appreciated and good to see you back round again love and hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
J

jaimiesays

16 years 1 month ago

i loved this poem, i read it

i loved this poem, i read it over and over. beautifully written with a wonderful flow. jaimie
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Rhyme is all about the flow

Rhyme is all about the flow so your compliment is much appreciated will be round reading shortly will have a look and see what you've been doing ... thanks so much for the read and the comment love JayCee x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
loved

loved

16 years 1 month ago

just about

..... the loveliest poem i have read in a while gr8888888888
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Deae Loved

So glad you liked my poem love and hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Mand

If someone had of told me two years ago that I would be writing and sharing my words with the whole world ? I would have told them to get a check up from the neck up but its in my blood now I love writing and I love that people enjoy my words ... thanks for the lovely comment I really appreciated it (hugs) love JayCee x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

16 years 1 month ago

Laced Destiny in Pearl

Dear Lady Jayne What can one say! You wonders you perform creating such pictures for us to see. Rhyming not often happens for me I stream but does occasionally I can do a few when the my muse comes. Maybe I need to take out my wings and dust them off Ha! The best of my life is somewhere ahead With the days fo my life not waiting for me I can't waste a second before flying free (still searching I have found what I want but whether it is to be is another matter) Beautiful just flowing like my steam down by the riverside. Always Electric Blue
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dearest Magz

Just writing a few rhymers lol been a while since I have written many ... so glad you liked this ... you take care ill come see tonight if you have anything new for me, its been a while since I read one from you me thinks ((hugs)) love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")