DawningDaytripper

May 04, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Multiple choice

What if I told you I don't careor that what you had to saymattered not What if I told you so whatyour feelings make no difference What if I told you get over ityou are nobody special Would you ignore me?

believe me?wonder why?prove me wrong?show me the same?maybe show me up? What if I told you I care about youmore than anything What if I told you your feelings dictate what I dowithout you I am at a loss What if I told you hold me closeI need you to be with me Which do you prefer to believe?Which do you find more believable? And of the six choiceswhich have you optedto use most recently?

— DawningDaytripper, May 04, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Robe valley, WA, USA

Favorite Poets: All of them, for differant reasons. Neopoet poets have influenced me the most over the last 2 plus years. Great teachers. Edgar Allen Poe, Dickens, way to many to list...

Critiques

Mark

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Julie

I think this poem is about attitude imo Which way will one go? How does one view what there is? What action will one take? This is certainly a mature simplistic pose of - What's up with you? It is also my all time favorite poem with "if" in it. Most people do not understand attitude much less that it is a choice and even les that it can make or break an entire country (or website) ;) Awesome work ! Mark Resilient Flexibility RUN; when there seems to be no answer common sense will not speak, so run - -go running..

DawningDaytripper

16 years 1 month ago

It is certainly about the

It is certainly about the choices we decide to make Mark, What attitude we approach it and life with. What we chose to believe, or what is more believable, and where we want to stand in that. I so glad that my usage of if was acceptable, I am aware of your dislike of it in general. Right now I am going through training for adopting my nieces and I wrote this write to get me back in the frame of mind needed to go and deal with all the burecratic hoops that a system, with good intent, can cause. Thanks for reading and taking the time to comment, much appreaciated. Julie D.D.

Geezer

16 years 1 month ago

Multiple choice...

Julie, this is awesome! You are so unpredictable! You shine in some places,like an uncut jewel, and every so often, like a polished gem. This is ready to be hung around your neck, to be worn as a finished piece. Nom. for the spot. ~ Gee

DawningDaytripper

16 years 1 month ago

You are to kind Gee, I love

You are to kind Gee, I love you!! I do try to think outside of my box. It helps. Thanks for your comment and love, right back at ya, doubled up double D, stlye! Julie D.D.

DawningDaytripper

16 years 1 month ago

Little of both probably Eph,

Little of both probably Eph, Thanks and what a compliment coming from such talent, Julie D.D.

seabhac

16 years 1 month ago

Excellent questionaire

Perfect to hand to a boyfriend/girlfriend on a first date as a tick list and I bet the reaction would intimate so much ...may just try this!!! Seabhac

DawningDaytripper

16 years 1 month ago

Yes it could say alot about

Yes it could say alot about a person, I just meant it more for a question's to ask ourselves, or one's I ask myself. But I can just imagine its many uses. Thanks for your time and caring comment Seabhac, appreaciated as always. Julie D.D.

R.M.Shanmugam

16 years 1 month ago

every one would itend to say

every one would itend to say the first set and end up saying the second set. a strikingly written poem. love. shan

DawningDaytripper

16 years 1 month ago

But some try to deny the

But some try to deny the first set, then have trouble living the second. But your take is so appreaciated Shan, so glad to see you. I loved your last post on pride and lust, it made me think. Julie D.D.

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Good one Julie

A clever idea for a poem...well done. Rosina xena465

DawningDaytripper

16 years 1 month ago

I tend to think of it of how

I tend to think of it of how unpoetic my mind thinks, but just that turns it to poetry for me. One of the reason I love poetry is because it is a kind of contradiction to the other parts of my personality. LOL. So glad you liked it, thank you for your time and comment Rosina, you are precious. Julie D.D.

Candlewitch

16 years 1 month ago

Hello Julie

I found this poem to have a most interesting concept. I really liked the multiple choice. Always, Cat

DawningDaytripper

16 years 1 month ago

Thank you Cat, I will try

Thank you Cat, I will try to return the favor and stop by soon. Your time and comment were great to read. So glad the multiple choices were acommadating. ;-) Julie D.D.

hobo

16 years 1 month ago

and my choice is

well let me see, I like this very much and I chose What if I told you hold me close I need you to be with me but then again I am always in the mood for love haha. nice work

lou

16 years ago

cool

COOL