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Thulisile
May 03, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

THE DAY I NO LONGER HAD YOU

3 YEARS AFTER THAT DAY .
I CAN STILL RECALL  IT  , HOW WHEN THEY SAID YOU DIED ON THE HOPISTAL bed ON YOUR OWN,
a woman  who gave so much to receive nothing , a breeder of leaders, to die in poverty ,
you went away without seeing the fruits of  your labour ,
instead of screaming .I RETREATED TO THE BATHROOM  ,WITH
regrets for I should have been a better  grand daughter than the one you left behind.  
I miss you.
— Thulisile, May 03, 2010

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Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Copriuos

this could be a really good poem with a little work and I took the liberty of doing it if you dont mind three years after that day. I can still recall it, how they said you died in your hospital bed on your own, a woman who gave so much to receive nothing, a breeder of leaders, to die in poverty, you went away without seeing the fruits of your labour, instead of screaming, I retreated to the bathroom, with regrets that I should have been a better granddaughter than the one you left behind. I miss you. Hope you didnt mind but your caps dont say it, if your words wont either but with a small tweak this is a great poem in my humble opinion this is a five star poem with an edit love JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")