Seren

May 02, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

A Ghost Whispers of the Night

in the cascade of twilight
as days fingers stretched
one last grasp of light
over the horizon

I watched a silhouette
fall to its knees,
and wave
in its weeping

moving closer
it was as if
the fingers of day
reached over
and pulled you
under Azimuths cowl

shadow melts
into shadow

I was left wondering
in delusions of illusions

as I hear
the whispers
of ghosts

and watch
the fingers of darkness
encroaching ever closer
to the hem of my shroud

— Seren, May 02, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

shirley harrison

16 years 1 month ago

Lovely words beautiful poem

Hey Jaycee, I had to see if it was my paddy! your writing is spell binding. shirley harrison

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Thanks for the comment so happy you liked this one (hugs) I am going to read for a little bit tonight will catch up with what you been doing love and big hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Woot Navvy I am very happy

Woot Navvy I am very happy that you can see it ~! I like to say I paint with my pen, cause I certainly am no great shakes with a brush lol thanks so much for your lovely comment love and hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Kailashana

16 years 1 month ago

Such a gem you are,

Such a gem you are, Jayne-Chloe. All your facets, so polished, so brilliant, so shining! Yours, "The plain man is familiar with blindness and deafness, and knows from his everyday experience that the look of things is influenced by his senses, but it never occurs to him to regard the whole world as a creation of his senses." ~ Ernst Mach

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Mum

I dont feel so flash at the moment but your comment made me smile so thank you so much for that, going to read for a bit tonight((hugs)) love and hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

ziggy

16 years 1 month ago

hi

hi jayne nothing different here ! still as well written as ever ,,zigs

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Ziggy

I will be posting that edit when I get up in the morning so it will be your nightime I guess lol hope you like what ive done with it thanks for the read and the comment its much appreciated love and hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

club special

16 years 1 month ago

I’m hiding under the

I'm hiding under the covers right now...Club Special

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Hello stranger glad you

Hello stranger glad you liked it I think? covers and all hahah made me smile thanks love and hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Great JayCee

I've often felt those ghostly presences around me...sometimes nice ones...some, not so nice. Rosina xena465

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Rosina

there was a kind of sixth sense mystery with this one ... I am speaking as a ghost and the last line was the key the dark fingers and my shroud lol shrouds are put on people when they are buried here sometimes not so much as they used to be used I was just playing with it love and big hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

mantiscepter

16 years 1 month ago

Shrouds

Well heck I wanted more, It stopped and I was not ready, nice whispers. could I added or subtracted, maybe, but who cares.... lovely write. And I still want more. Love John

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear John

I have written a couple like this one not all finished and there is another one that goes with this one so the experience isnt quite over yet lol thanks my friend for the comment and the read its much appreciated love and biggest hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Nordic cloud

16 years 1 month ago

..we hang on the words by the skin of our teeth

Ann of Norway "as days fingers stretched  one last grasp of light  over the horizon" How loaded is that, how desperate, how pleading, how full of pathos, And what metaphors spill from the mind as we read, we hang on the words by the skin of our teeth, or with our nails, uttering their sounds, with trepidation and even a hint of regret. For this is so powerful a few lines as to set the whole drama of life like a tablecloth, ready for the meal of the dualistic kitchens, brewed up in cauldrons of fire and water, the dark versus the light, flooding our consciousness with images of bitter sweet pungency as we too fall into the inevitable pot to die with the day in the hopes of rising again the next day. "I watched a silhouette  fall to its knees,   and wave  in its weeping" Oh what spectres silhouette was that, its feather-light touch on my door? To kneel, collapse outside it, hoping to enter. Its soul riding on the gentle swell of life's waves of fortune and illusions. "and watch  the fingers of darkness  encroaching ever closer  to the hem of my shroud" Creeping unawares the Reaper, darkness, void, black, touches your shroud. Powerful this dearest Jayne, you cause the 'soul' to shudder a moment with these phrases. Yes awesome is the word as we see ourselves in your place and feel the drama of the content of this, your wonderful poem. Love to you with sombre face and quiet contemplative spirit, Ann.

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Ann

Its not a quiet Somber face at the moment its laughing lol Snake just got off the computer and said you and he have a secret, cheeky buggar he is all in fun ...I am smiling and wondering what you are both up as well ~!lmao so glad you liked this one Ann it was one I played with, its from the ghosts perspective I am talking as the ghost and the clue is the last word shroud lol loved those same lines you picked out as well they are some of my favourites biggest hugs of love dear one Jayne-Chloe still smiling and wondering @ you two and snakes laughing at me lol thanks for the giggle whatever it is I needed a big laugh lol ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Nordic cloud

16 years 1 month ago

thanks for the giggle whatever it is I needed a big laugh lol

Ann of Norway Wouldn't you like to know!!!! Love dear you(pl) from Ann

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

hes been teasing me all day

hes been teasing me all day your both norty lol spanks but its funny he loves having something over me ... biggest smiles love to you darlin JayCee x x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

lyz

16 years 1 month ago

Thats my girl

Another to add to the faves. This is magical in a mystique fashion. Love the title and the content is a presence in it's self. I was wanting more, though. I know, greed, not a good thing, lol. Just awesome girl. XX

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dearest Lyz

Glad you found another favourite ... hows the girl going? I been thinking about her lots while I am laying round lol ... hurry up lil storm not long now eh ? I have a couple more similar to this one but not quite done yet love and biggest hugs JayCee x x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

lyz

16 years ago

A+

Yes, another fave. Why do you make me choose, bitch. Love ya, lol. All going well as it can with Jade, not long now. I just need to get this month over with. I think you have written an awesome piece and I have yet to read others of yours. I will soon, hopefully. Keep your fingers crossed for us. Need it at the mo. Love and bravo. XX

Seren

16 years ago

Dearest Lyz

IN a few months you wont have to chose some of them will be in a book lol I will make sure you get a copy :) I am glad Jades doing well huni let her know Kens wifes in the hospital today having her first as well lol wooot babies everywhere i am loving it lol love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")