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lou
lou

Exploration ( Rated R for Content)

I want to explore you, probe the peaks and ravines
bodies aching, vibrating to be as one. dripping with sweetness
tips of fingers indent flesh, tongues dip and collide
sample smooth skin, salty, fresh

enfold my limbs, to avoid escape
warm breath against back of my neck
we two moulded in perfect unity
I need our lips to brush , nip and suckle, hands cup and caress

electricity, sparks fly and spring up, eyes blaze
let the essence of you burrow deep inside
undulation as pure energy connects
gasping breathless clinging entwined

pure release heaven aligned

— lou, May 02, 2010

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Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda , Jack Kerouac, Alan Ginsberg, D.H Lawrence, Jim Morrison's lyrics,

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Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 1 month ago

Hmmmm.Copulation theories

Hmmmm. Copulation theories and exercises explore the golden ratio, sing this song of lovers unbound. Niiiiiiice! ~A "The plain man is familiar with blindness and deafness, and knows from his everyday experience that the look of things is influenced by his senses, but it never occurs to him to regard the whole world as a creation of his senses." ~ Ernst Mach
lou

lou

16 years 1 month ago

Too Rude ?

Didn't know if I should submit this one.
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 1 month ago

Rude? You haven’t read

Rude? You haven't read 2/3 of my poetry or comments then. Your poem is lovely, no rudeness at all. Besides, rudeness is in the eye of the beholder and the poet's intent, eh? ;-) ~A "The plain man is familiar with blindness and deafness, and knows from his everyday experience that the look of things is influenced by his senses, but it never occurs to him to regard the whole world as a creation of his senses." ~ Ernst Mach
lou

lou

16 years 1 month ago

rude

I was partly kidding when I asked if it was too rude, but I did wonder whether to post it because it is explicit.
hobo

hobo

16 years 1 month ago

Girl you are killing me

Girl you are killing me. my temp is 105 and rising lol. I feel like I need to lay back and smoke a cigeratte and I don't even smoke. This is hot, hot, hot and I love it :)
lou

lou

16 years 1 month ago

Haha

Maybe I should have taken a cold shower, instead of writing this ? I'm glad that you liked the poem. Lou
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 1 month ago

I would have...

been sorely disappointed, had you shown me this, and then not posted it. Very nice work. Only tweak I see, is keeping the tenses in the line: the essence of you, burrow[ing] deep inside. Oh, and a comma between the words; salty[,]fresh [or maybe add, and between them]. And yes, indeed, you made the temp. rise, ~ Gee
lou

lou

16 years 1 month ago

Thanks

I really value your input
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Dalton

16 years ago

i liked the last two lines

i liked the last two lines the best the fact that they rhymed well i use that little trick myself. you certainly have the gift it is a joy to read your work. john x
lou

lou

16 years ago

Thanks

Thank you so much xx