piano man

as you tinker between the keysmy heart swells and balancesteetering where the totteringgoes round and round notes like life bloodpouring from poor fingersin ill-fated ways and I lose every breathI ever gave youin one single blowto the heart break me againagainst waveslike skipping stones make me quiet and stillbring me backhere where less is morewithout effort than with

— theladyblue, May 02, 2010

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Country/Region: USA

Critiques

Roscoe Lane

16 years 2 months ago

Excellent,

beautifully written, Regards Roscoe.

theladyblue

16 years 2 months ago

thank you so much!

<3 Emarie "i read you and see…that between the pen, paper and you…there is little room for me…" ~ heart breaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Emarie

as always I loved your poem only had a problem with this line pours from poor fingers it impeaded the flow I will think on it I have a couple of ideas that maybe work love and hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

theladyblue

16 years 2 months ago

i stumbled in the same spot...

i replaced it with 'pouring'...i think that flows much better...thats what i get for posting in the middle of the night lol...thanks so much for the comment!!! <3 Emarie "i read you and see…that between the pen, paper and you…there is little room for me…" ~ heart breaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

EuphoriaDestruct

16 years 2 months ago

so nostalgic, seems like

so nostalgic, seems like something Dorian Gray would be reading to his lovers.

theladyblue

16 years 2 months ago

For me...

this is an epic compliment! <3 Dorian Gray *sigh* Thank you so much! <3 Emarie "i read you and see…that between the pen, paper and you…there is little room for me…" ~ heart breaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Good one here

Lady Blue you go girl, loved this it is a very well flowing piece of yours. How are things in Arkansas? Mona xox TIME well spent is TIME well lived

theladyblue

16 years 2 months ago

Thanks again Mona

Things are good...just torando hoppin lol... <3 Emarie "i read you and see…that between the pen, paper and you…there is little room for me…" ~ heart breaker~ Go Live & Get Rewarded!!! Check us out at http://www.neopoet.com/forum/20761 & the Community Calender!!!

Restlesslittlesoul

16 years 1 month ago

WOW!

I can perfectly understand why Esker loves your poetry so much! Brilliant! http://restlesslittlesoul.webs.com

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