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Bonitaj
Bonitaj
May 01, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

AS IF


'As if -Time never existedyou grasped me with both handsand said"you're staying here -no going forward or looking back". Those wordshad taken my whole life to bearThey almost surpassed the realityof having you here. As if -Love always existedyou directed the wayEntrance was free -I had already paid. After so many losses,so much defeat,Your eyes beckoned me into celebrate -Love's sweet surfeit...  BjR  1 May, '10
— Bonitaj, May 01, 2010

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Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

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Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Boni

I feel a softening in this one .. beautifully done as always I enjoy your poetry this ones lovely it shows a whole different side of you, acquiese to loves will sigh love and hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
xena465

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Ah Romance

I think I remember it now your lovely poem has enlightened me...nice one Boni. Rosina xena465
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 1 month ago

thanks guys

no time to reply individually - running around these UNITED STATES (of emotions too ;) Catch you 'all later! Boni
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 1 month ago

A gentle expression of this state of coming home, Bonni;

Ann of Norway I hope it was the right person, and not a tempter, like the spider and the fly! You make us feel the slightest doubt in my mind, so desperate in your wish to be nailed! A gentle expression of this state of coming home, Bonni; with my love Ann. Those words "I’d waited my whole life to hear They almost  surpassed the reality of having you here." Although the 'hear' and the 'here' are perfectly legitimate, they still grate in my minds sound pattern as they are!
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 1 month ago

Hello Ann

ALways do appreciate your honesty! Slight tweaking - hope there's some improvememt! ;) Keep well Boni
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 1 month ago

Love can wrap us up and

Love can wrap us up and dictate the way Boni, Sometimes for the good, sometimes the not so good. Great read and share, loved it. Julie D.D.
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poetrylove11

16 years 1 month ago

I loved this! it expresses

I loved this! it expresses the hope of new love very well, I loved the thing about time stopping and "no going forward or looking back." "stopped me in my tracks"- i feel like you could change this line to make it more creative? just a suggestion.