That Smile

that smile you gave methat little tilt of your headnothing could save meno matter what I said curl of your index fingermischievous twinkle in your eyestaste of your sweet lips lingerall hinted, of my demise I let you lead me astraybeyond your bedroom doorlisten to the words you saytelling me what's in store I know I'm a dead manwhen you sink your nails in mejust part of your wicked planto never set me free you'll reach into my souland tug at my fragile heartuntil you reach your goalthe power to tear me apart will you leave me in despairwith a pile of broken partsor will you work on the repairof two lonely broken hearts that smile you give methat tilt of your headdon't ever set me freejust as well be dead copyright 5-1-10 huey horton (hippiepoet69)

— hippiepoet69, May 01, 2010

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DawningDaytripper

16 years 1 month ago

What happened to the Dung

What happened to the Dung Post!!! I am so kidding. That was so much fun. I love your last stanza, and I don't mind being the blackwidow in my husbands life lOl. Smooth, I liked it alot. Great write. Julie D.D.

hippiepoet69

16 years 1 month ago

Thanks Julie

I goofed up trying to fix my Dung. I hate that I lost the comments. But I will repost the revised poem. All I can say is I'm inspired by the love of my life. I got off the phone last night with a shit eating grin. My cordless went dead. And she had to put the charger on her cell. Teenagers! I started another poem after I went to bed. So I feel like Blah! this morning with a smile on my face. I will either repost Days of OOld or the poem I'm working on tonight. Keep a little of that Black widow in your marrage. A little spice always helps. Take Care. huey

magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Great one here poet

Flow was wonderful. Wording rightly placed and full of awe at your write right about now hpoet. Bravo Love, Magics02 TIME well spent is TIME well lived

hippiepoet69

16 years 1 month ago

Thanks Mona

I just needed inspired. And I am working on improving my writting. Maybe some people will like this rhyme pattern better. But it is not new to me. But I still don't worry too much about count. Take Care. huey

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Dear huey

Another great write...I hope she stuck around...if not...her loss. Rosina xena465

hippiepoet69

16 years 1 month ago

Thanks Zena

I walked out of her life 27 years ago. I should say ran. I think we both need each other now. We are still dancing around one word like we did back in the days of old. Take Care. huey

jetz

16 years 1 month ago

Hmmmmmm, seems in my

Hmmmmmm, seems in my absence, I have missed a lot. Give me a day or so to catch up....an email with some details on this new love would help, too !!! This writing is a "rejuvenated" you. Your flow is so natural. I'm impressed!! I am also happy for you!!! Tell me more !!!!! hugs

hippiepoet69

16 years 1 month ago

Thanks Sue

She does renew me. She was not my first love or my last. But she has a place in my heart that can't be replaced. The story of us is unfolding in my poems. Stay tuned. Take Care. huey

Tim

16 years 1 month ago

Huey, thought I’d return

Huey, thought I'd return the compliment and pick one of yours to read. i think this one is is an absolute beauty mate, well done you. I am a big fan of your sort of flow and rhyme, which is not unlike my normal style. Nice one, Tim

hippiepoet69

16 years 1 month ago

Thanks Tim

I thought that title would catch your eye. I like this style, That is one reason I like your writting. I try to use good grammer and check my spelling. And correct use of words. So I want readers to bring them to my attention. But some I will not change. I like to check my use of some words. And refresh my vocabulary. I don't use word I don't already know. I used to take the Reader's Digest vocabulary test all the time. I always tested Good. Never any less or any better. I use rhymezone.com. After you find the right page it is a real good site. Take Care. huey