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shazbat
shazbat
May 01, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

No user serviceable parts

I am not a robot

I am not made of steel

I’ve a mind I’ve a brain

I can think, I can feel

Through my frame courses blood

Deep inside beats a heart

I am not a robot

Don’t tear me apart
 

You could never repair

The parts that get broken

You haven’t the tools

And words softly spoken

May lead you to think

That your game has been won

I am not a robot.

The damage is done

— shazbat, May 01, 2010

About This Poem

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Region, Country: Norfolk, UK, GBR

Favorite Poets: Kipling, T.S Eliot, Hilaire Belloc, Ogden Nash, Spike Milligan and many more.

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hippiepoet69

16 years 1 month ago

Thumbs up

I don't use stars. I liked the poem and think it was well written. But I'm not real keen on the title. I have trouble coming up with titles on some of mine. Keep writting. Take Care. huey
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shirley harrison

16 years 1 month ago

Lovely

I can see this very clearly, wonderful write. i do agree with Eph this title doesnt give it justice, "the steel factory" even just an idea,im better with the titles than i am at writing so just to say thats probably why people come to see mine! Kind regards shirley harrison
shazbat

shazbat

16 years 1 month ago

Shirley, I have taken

Shirley, I have taken everyones advice and changed the title, this was written late on saturday night after a long hard day so my thinking head wasn't working too well and it was way past my bedtime. Thanks for your comments and stars they are very much appreciated. John
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anonymous1

16 years 1 month ago

Words softly spoken...

I love this poem. And the title works for me, as it lends to the point of the poem, which is highlighted best in these lines: The parts that get broken You haven’t the tools And then, as if to say that a mere apology (words softly spoken) could be used as a tool to fix the damage, the ending ensures that no part of this damaged person can be repaired or replaced. What do you think of breaking this up into 4 stanzas of 4 lines each? Thank you for this bit of pleasure today. Lisa
shazbat

shazbat

16 years 1 month ago

Lisa, I am so glad that you

Lisa, I am so glad that you enjoyed this one and that it was understood fully too, once someones heart or spirit is broken they can never be the same again, can they? I dashed this off in a bit of a hurry, I got the idea while driving home late on saturday night and got it written down as soon as I got home before it got consigned to my junk heap of a memory. I've just had another look and have changed it to two eight line stanzas which I hope works better. Thanks again for reading. John
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anonymous1

16 years 1 month ago

Good revision.

I see know, from the revisions, that the title, 'no serviceable user parts,' is the new title, but it's the one that I spoke about above. I love it even more in light of how you came about it. It's a very human poem - one of my favorites. Thanks, Lisa
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hippiepoet69

16 years 1 month ago

Good Title

The title caught my eye. Then I seen I had already read it. This title fits. Take Care. huey
shazbat

shazbat

16 years 1 month ago

Thanks Huey, I wasn’t too

Thanks Huey, I wasn't too keen on the original title either then i was clearing out some old electrical equipment and noticed this written on the bottom of something and hey presto thats what it became. Thanks again for the comments they are very much appreciated. John
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Silent_Rain

16 years 1 month ago

:)

Brovo!! This is a wonderful poem!!! ~Rain~ There's always a rainbow after the rain...